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Without capital punishment (the dealt penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Without capital punishment (the dealt penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. with this opinion? v. 1
Whether building an ancient designed house or a house according to people’s choice is an elusive issue. However, while some feel that home should be replicated like as they built in the past, I agree with those who hold the opinion that houses should be constructed according to owner’s choice which allowed by the government. On the one hand, it could be argued that traditional pattern should be followed for building new homes in the locality as they often look alike. As a result, residential sometimes feel a sense of equality, also they give classic look to the neighbourhood. Constructing building in a way like the older one in the past can deter the audacious display of wealth. However, I believe that mankind should be allowed to build the homes in a way they want as it is the reflection of the owner’s personality. Therefore, the government should let decide occupants the style of their home and how they should look. Furthermore, traditional homes have a lack of privacy and comfort, whereas new designed places involve washrooms’ that are attached to each bedroom and provide comfort in life. In addition, I would say that latest building has CCTV cameras’ and burglary alarms’ to avoid the risk in an emergency which lack in ancient houses. To sum up, although ancient design, building creates a sense of equality, privacy and comfort life is matter at some point as well. Thus, on balance, I believe the government should allow people to construct home according to their preference, which is the right of the individual.
Whether
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building
an ancient designed
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house
or a
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house
according to
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people
’s choice is an elusive issue.
However
, while
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some
feel that home should
be replicated
like as they built in the past, I
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agree
with those who hold the opinion that
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houses
should
be constructed
according to owner’s choice which
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allowed
by the
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government
.

On the one hand, it could
be argued
that traditional pattern should
be followed
for
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building
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
in the locality as they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
look alike.
As a result
, residential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
feel a sense of equality,
also
they give classic look to the
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neighbourhood
. Constructing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
in a way like the older one in the past can deter the audacious display of wealth.

However
, I believe that mankind should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to build the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
in a way they want as it is the reflection of the owner’s personality.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
decide occupants the style of their home and how they should look.
Furthermore
, traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
have a lack of privacy and comfort, whereas new designed places involve washrooms’ that
are attached
to each bedroom and provide comfort in life.
In addition
, I would say that latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
has CCTV cameras’ and burglary alarms’ to avoid the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
in an emergency which lack in ancient
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.

To sum up, although ancient design,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
creates a sense of equality, privacy and comfort life is matter at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point
as well
.
Thus
, on balance, I believe the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to construct home according to their preference, which is the right of the individual.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment (the dealt penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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