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with the recent improvements to the internet, poeple can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. is this good or bad, discuss both side and giving your opinion. v.1

with the recent improvements to the internet, poeple can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. is this good or bad, v. 1
In the high-tech era, smoking is becoming an alarming issue in all over the world. More and more people smoke in their life and they know, smoking is an evil habit but they do which is perilous for their health as cancer and other dangerous diseases. It not only injures for the smokers as smoking, but also affects those people who are nearby them. Hence, smoking should be disallowed these places which are based public like parks, gardens and many more. I strongly agree with the given statement. I will discuss the reason why smoking should be banned in the public areas in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, smoking is a dangerous habit for all the people as well as the environment. It leads to the number of the diseases like cancer which is hazards for the mouths and also the lungs. It damages the fresh air throughout the flumes as smoking. Those people who smoke, they reduced their body cells, after that they feel weak, then die from the world. Smoking affects the person visible overnight, they have to go some suffer during the life. In addition to it, smoking is a universal habit, as it not only leads to the person who is a smoker but also those innocent people who are around them. To illustrate one of my friends who never did smog, but his father took too much smoke at home. As a result, my friend addicted lung cancer without smoking. Owning to his father did mistake. So, government should be banned the smoking habit which is spreading in all the world. Like as, Australia' authorities have made many rules and laws to stop the smoking in public as well as the private places. So, the government should allow to the laws, which can be stopped the smoking. To conclude, although smoking has become an important issue in all countries of the world, yet it is very necessary to disallow the smoking by the government. Smoking is an injure habit, which is very difficult to leave. So, the government ought to be yielded many rules regarding the smoking in public places.
In the high-tech era,
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smoking
is becoming an alarming issue in all over the
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world
. More and more
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people
smoke in their
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life and
they know,
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smoking
is an evil
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habit
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but
they do which is perilous for their health as cancer and other
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dangerous
diseases. It not
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only
injures for the smokers as
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smoking
,
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also
affects those
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people
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who
are nearby them.
Hence
,
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smoking
should
be disallowed
these places which
are based
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public
like parks, gardens and
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more. I
strongly
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agree
with the
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given
statement. I will discuss the reason why
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smoking
should
be banned
in the
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public
areas in the upcoming paragraphs.

To embark with,
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smoking
is a
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dangerous
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habit
for all the
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people
as well
as the environment. It leads to the number of the diseases like cancer which is hazards for the mouths and
also
the lungs. It damages the fresh air throughout the flumes as
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smoking
. Those
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people
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who
smoke, they
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reduced
their body cells, after that they feel weak, then
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die
from the
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world
.
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Smoking
affects the person visible overnight, they
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have to
go
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some
suffer during the life.

In addition
to it,
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smoking
is a universal
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habit
, as it not
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only
leads to the person
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who
is a smoker
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but
also
those innocent
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people
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who
are around them. To illustrate one of my friends
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who
never did smog,
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but
his father took too much smoke at home.
As a result
, my friend addicted lung cancer without
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smoking
. Owning to his father did mistake.
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So
,
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government
should
be banned
the
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smoking
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habit
which is spreading in all the
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world
. Like as, Australia' authorities have made
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many
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rules
and laws to
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stop
the
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smoking
in
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public
as well
as the private places.
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So
, the
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government
should
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allow
to the laws, which can be
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stopped
the smoking.

To conclude
, although
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smoking
has become an
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important
issue in all countries of the
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world
,
yet
it is
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very
necessary to disallow the
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smoking
by the
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government
.
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Smoking
is an
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injure
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habit
, which is
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very
difficult to
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leave
.
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, the
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government
ought to
be yielded
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many
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rules
regarding the
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smoking
in
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public
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay with the recent improvements to the internet, poeple can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. is this good or bad, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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