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With the recent improvement to internet, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing, Discuss both giving your opinion with examples. v.1

With the recent improvement to internet, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing, v. 1
People are expressing their thoughts and feelings connecting with internet and technological devices about the product that they have bought in recent times. Posting comments on purchased goods have both negative and positive effect on consumers and producers. From my perspective, sharing experience on internet through social networking sites brings positive attitude towards products through which vendor and vendee both will be benefited; however, the negativity may down the market in a second. Commenting on their own desired products have become an increasingly popular norm among people as internet is available all the time. In fact, It is good that products which they had wanted to buy. Besides that they would also come to that whether it is suitable product for them or not. Furthermore, they do not need to search the shop to buy that product and can save time from unnecessary burgain. Moreover, producer will be encourage to produce such kinds of products which have been appreciated by the customers. Therefore, leaving some feedbacks on the products which people bought on internet, is invariably useful. Conversly, if the same desired products of customer proved to be unproductive and fruitless, people would write atrocious or negative comments on the products on social networking sites. As a result, for example, the industries may go to astray in order to their bad production which is unable to satisfy the need of people. In addition, there will be an adverse effect on other consummers who could have shown unwilling attitude to buy those products which had been varified, sealed and banned. Hence, it will hamper not only the goodwill of the company but it will comments on the products on Facebook, Twitter, Skype, and so on, to name but a few would move the root of organization. In conclusion, i would say that it is true that internet helps people to say their opinion on certain types of products after using it. In contrast, it has both negative and positive sites since it is seen by the public who may accept it viewing outstanding comment or may reject it.
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People
are expressing their thoughts and feelings connecting with internet and technological devices about the
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product
that they have
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bought
in recent times. Posting
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comments
on
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purchased
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goods
have both
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negative
and
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positive
effect on consumers and producers. From my perspective, sharing experience on internet through social networking sites brings
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positive
attitude towards
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products
through which vendor and
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vendee
both will
be benefited
;
however
, the negativity may down the market in a second.

Commenting on their
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own
desired
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products
have become an
increasingly
popular norm among
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people
as internet is available all the time. In fact, It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
that
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products
which they had wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
.
Besides
that they would
also
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come
to that whether it
Please check whether an article is missing: "is a suitable" or "is an suitable"
is suitable
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product
for them or not.
Furthermore
, they do not need to search the shop to
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buy
that
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product
and can save time from unnecessary
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burgain
.
Moreover
, producer will be
Consider using the past participle "encouraged"?
encourage
to produce such kinds of
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products
which have
been appreciated
by the customers.
Therefore
, leaving
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some
feedbacks on the
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products
which
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people
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bought
on internet, is
invariably
useful.

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Conversly
, if the same desired
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products
of customer proved to be unproductive and fruitless,
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people
would write atrocious or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
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comments
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
on social networking sites.
As a result
,
for example
, the industries may go to astray in order to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
production which is unable to satisfy the need of
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people
.
In addition
, there will be an adverse effect on other
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consummers
who could have shown unwilling attitude to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
those
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products
which had been
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varified
, sealed and banned.
Hence
, it will hamper not
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only
the goodwill of the
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company
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but
it will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "comment"
comments
on the
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products
on Facebook, Twitter, Skype, and
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so
on, to name
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but
a few would
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move
the root of organization.

In conclusion
,
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i
would say that it is true that internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
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people
to say their opinion on certain types of
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products
after using it.
In contrast
, it has both
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negative
and
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positive
sites since it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
by the public who may accept it viewing outstanding
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comment
or may reject it.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay With the recent improvement to internet, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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