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8) Think about a book that you have enjoyed reading. Why did you like it? What was especially interesting about the book? v.1

8) Think about a book that you have enjoyed reading. Why did you like it? What was especially interesting about the book? v. 1
It is often claimed that the pollutants from vehicles are the biggest source of deterioration of the climate, while according to others industries are the crux of such environmental damage. Although cars, undoubtedly, cause a detrimental effect on the urban environment, the catastrophe industrialism creates is a way bigger. Emission of harmful gases from cars, trucks, bikes and many others creates a dangerous situation in cities. The gases like sulphur, carbon and nitrogen are the main constituents in the depletion of the ozone layer. As an alternative to this, scientists came up with an idea to run vehicles on sustainable sources of energy. For instance, electric cars in the market are booming in sales compared to motor vehicles which on conventional fuel. As a result, deterioration in the environment is controlled and can be improvement in the air quality index is done. In addition to that, the government is promoting public transport services to citizens in order to curb deterioration from cars. In stark contrast, development in the industrial sector has been advanced due to several reasons. As consumerism in the market is growing, industries of various varieties and categories of products are set up. People requires various choices in purchasing a particular product. Boost to industries, construction creates various types of deterioration which eventually brings long-term consequences to the ecosystem. Amazon has set-up new second largest office in India as online consumerism is in great demand today which eventually create pollution in long-time. To summarise, both cars and industries are the culprit of the pollution in cities. But, pollution from industries are creating severe impact to habitat as various controls are not imposed on them.
It is
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often
claimed that the pollutants from vehicles are the biggest source of
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deterioration
of the climate, while according to others
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industries
are the crux of such environmental damage. Although
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cars
,
undoubtedly
, cause a detrimental effect on the urban environment, the catastrophe industrialism
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creates
is a way bigger.

Emission of harmful gases from
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cars
, trucks, bikes and
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many
others
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creates
a
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dangerous
situation in cities. The gases like
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sulphur
, carbon and nitrogen are the main constituents in the depletion of the ozone layer. As an alternative to this, scientists came up with an
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idea
to run vehicles on sustainable sources of energy.
For instance
, electric
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cars
in the market are booming in sales compared to motor vehicles which on conventional fuel.
As a result
,
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deterioration
in the environment
is controlled
and can be improvement in the air quality index
is done
.
In addition
to that, the
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government
is promoting public transport services to citizens in order to curb
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deterioration
from cars.

In stark contrast, development in the industrial sector has
been advanced
due to several reasons. As consumerism in the market is growing,
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industries
of
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various
varieties and categories of products
are set
up.
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People
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requires
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various
choices in purchasing a particular product. Boost to
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industries
, construction
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creates
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various
types of
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deterioration
which
eventually
brings long-term
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consequences to
the ecosystem. Amazon
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has set-up
new second largest office in India as online consumerism is in great demand
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today
which
eventually
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create
pollution in long-time.

To
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summarise
, both
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cars
and
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industries
are the culprit of the pollution in cities.
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But
, pollution from
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industries
are creating severe impact to habitat as
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various
controls are not imposed on them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 8) Think about a book that you have enjoyed reading. Why did you like it? What was especially interesting about the book? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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