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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. v. 8
University education has become of utmost important for students to be successful in their job, career and life. Many people argue that university education can be given only by the rich class of the society. Poor and rural background students find it impossible to pursue university education. Though I completely agree with this statement, I believe that universities should devise various options for such students to get admitted in them, instead of making the entry easier for such group. One of the most important hurdle for poor students to enrol in universities is the huge course fees. In such cases, universities should create few scholarship programmes for poor students who are bright in a particular course. For instance, universities can conduct entrance exams for each year of the course based on which scholarships can be granted to such students. Universities can also provide concessions in buying course materials to reduce the burden of course expenses from the family of such students. For instance, based on the score in the entrance exam of few courses, Mumbai University grants various scholarships to students depending on their annual family income. Another important programme that universities can participate into are student exchange programmes. This will help bright but poor students to travel overseas and/or to different universities under student exchange programmes and hence get an experience to socialise with students from different cultures which otherwise is very difficult for them, given their financial condition. In addition, universities can also support poor students with part-time jobs inside university campus such as in a library, or at the canteen to help them financially so that they can at least cover for their college expenses. All in all, I strongly believe that universities should devise various programmes to help support poor and students from rural background so that no person is deprived of university education. This way education can be truly equal to all people.
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University
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education
has become of utmost
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important
for
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students
to be successful in their job, career and life.
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Many
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people
argue that
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university
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education
can be
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given
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only
by the rich
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class
of the society.
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Poor
and rural background
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students
find it impossible to pursue
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university
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education
. Though I completely
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agree
with this statement, I believe that
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universities
should devise various options for such
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students
to
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get
admitted in them,
instead
of making the entry easier for such group.

One of the most
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important
hurdle for
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poor
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students
to enrol in
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universities
is the huge
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course
fees. In such cases,
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universities
should create few scholarship
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programmes
for
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poor
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students
who are bright in a particular
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course
.
For instance
,
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universities
can conduct entrance exams for each year of the
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course
based on which scholarships can
be granted
to such
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students
.
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Universities
can
also
provide concessions in buying
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course
materials to
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reduce
the burden of
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course
expenses from the family of such
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students
.
For instance
, based on the score in the entrance exam of few
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courses
, Mumbai
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University
grants various scholarships to
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students
depending on their annual family income.

Another
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important
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programme
that
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universities
can participate into are
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student
exchange
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programmes
. This will
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help
bright
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but
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poor
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students
to travel overseas and/or to
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different
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universities
under
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student
exchange
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programmes
and
hence
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get
an experience to
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socialise
with
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students
from
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different
cultures which
otherwise
is
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very
difficult for them,
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given
their financial condition.
In addition
,
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universities
can
also
support
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poor
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students
with part-time jobs inside
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university
campus such as in a library, or at the canteen to
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help
them
financially
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so
that they can at least cover for their college expenses.

All in all, I
strongly
believe that
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universities
should devise various
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programmes
to
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help
support
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poor
and
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students
from rural background
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so
that no person
is deprived
of
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university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
. This way
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education
can be
truly
equal to all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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