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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement v. 2
Globalisation has led to an increase in opportunities in many sectors throughout the world. Due to this growth, people have started to move to different countries in search of opportunities and many a times settle there along with their families. Some might think that by promoting such movements, poor countries become deprived of such talents due to rich countries. In this essay, we will discuss that such movements are only a natural way of people settling in different countries based on good opportunities and pay scale. In last few decades, there is an increase in trend to first obtain specialisations in fields such as engineering, computing and medicine and then move to different countries where one can find better employment options. Another reason to trigger this movement is the pay scale that one receives in another country as compared to their own. Some people think that a person is betraying their country by first studying there and then moving to another country for earning. This way they are further degrading the economy of their own country. Instead they should stay in their home nation and devise ways to improve the economy of their own country. One can view this from a different angle as well. Many a times, the profile that an individual is looking for is more available in some other country. For instance, one of my friend had done professional courses in Wild Life Photography, but when it came to earning for a living, all the opportunities he got were mostly from Africa. This highlights one more fact, that while some people might measure opportunities in terms of money, but many others also think that exposure and on-field opportunities are also important. Hence, I think that moving to different countries is only a natural way of settling for an opportunity which one find very appealing and satisfactory.
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has led to an increase in
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sectors throughout the world. Due to this growth,
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people
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move
to
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different
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countries
in search of
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opportunities
and
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many
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a times
settle there along with their families.
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Some
might
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think
that by promoting such movements, poor
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countries
become deprived of such talents due to rich
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countries
. In this essay, we will discuss that such movements are
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only
a natural way of
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people
settling in
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different
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countries
based on
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good
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opportunities
and pay scale.

In last few decades, there is an increase in trend to
first
obtain
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specialisations
in fields such as engineering, computing and medicine and then
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move
to
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different
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countries
where one can find better employment options. Another reason to trigger this movement is the pay scale that one receives in another
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country
as compared to their
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own
.
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Some
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people
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think
that a person is betraying their
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country
by
first
studying there and then moving to another
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country
for earning. This way they are
further
degrading the economy of their
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own
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country
.
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Instead
they should stay in their home nation and devise ways to
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improve
the economy of their
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own
country.

One can view this from a
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different
angle
as well
.
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Many
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a times
, the profile that an individual is looking for is more available in
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some
other
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country
.
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, one of my friend had done professional courses in Wild Life Photography,
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but
when it came to earning for a living, all the
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opportunities
he
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got
were
mostly
from Africa. This highlights one more fact, that while
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some
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people
might measure
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opportunities
in terms of money,
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but
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many
others
also
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think
that exposure and on-field
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opportunities
are
also
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important
.
Hence
, I
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think
that moving to
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different
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countries
is
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only
a natural way of settling for an
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opportunity
which one find
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very
appealing and satisfactory.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
309 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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