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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement v.2

More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement v. 2
Globalisation has led to an increase in opportunities in many sectors throughout the world. Due to this growth, people have started to move to different countries in search of opportunities and many a times settle there along with their families. Some might think that by promoting such movements, poor countries become deprived of such talents due to rich countries. In this essay, we will discuss that such movements are only a natural way of people settling in different countries based on good opportunities and pay scale. In last few decades, there is an increase in trend to first obtain specialisations in fields such as engineering, computing and medicine and then move to different countries where one can find better employment options. Another reason to trigger this movement is the pay scale that one receives in another country as compared to their own. Some people think that a person is betraying their country by first studying there and then moving to another country for earning. This way they are further degrading the economy of their own country. Instead they should stay in their home nation and devise ways to improve the economy of their own country. One can view this from a different angle as well. Many a times, the profile that an individual is looking for is more available in some other country. For instance, one of my friend had done professional courses in Wild Life Photography, but when it came to earning for a living, all the opportunities he got were mostly from Africa. This highlights one more fact, that while some people might measure opportunities in terms of money, but many others also think that exposure and on-field opportunities are also important. Hence, I think that moving to different countries is only a natural way of settling for an opportunity which one find very appealing and satisfactory.
Globalisation
has led to an increase in
opportunities
in
many
sectors throughout the world. Due to this growth,
people
have
started
to
move
to
different
countries
in search of
opportunities
and
many
a times
settle there along with their families.
Some
might
think
that by promoting such movements, poor
countries
become deprived of such talents due to rich
countries
. In this essay, we will discuss that such movements are
only
a natural way of
people
settling in
different
countries
based on
good
opportunities
and pay scale.

In last few decades, there is an increase in trend to
first
obtain
specialisations
in fields such as engineering, computing and medicine and then
move
to
different
countries
where one can find better employment options. Another reason to trigger this movement is the pay scale that one receives in another
country
as compared to their
own
.
Some
people
think
that a person is betraying their
country
by
first
studying there and then moving to another
country
for earning. This way they are
further
degrading the economy of their
own
country
.
Instead
they should stay in their home nation and devise ways to
improve
the economy of their
own
country.

One can view this from a
different
angle
as well
.
Many
a times
, the profile that an individual is looking for is more available in
some
other
country
.
For instance
, one of my friend had done professional courses in Wild Life Photography,
but
when it came to earning for a living, all the
opportunities
he
got
were
mostly
from Africa. This highlights one more fact, that while
some
people
might measure
opportunities
in terms of money,
but
many
others
also
think
that exposure and on-field
opportunities
are
also
important
.
Hence
, I
think
that moving to
different
countries
is
only
a natural way of settling for an
opportunity
which one find
very
appealing and satisfactory.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement v. 2

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