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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. 1- Say where you think you left the papers. 2- Explain why they are so important3- Tell v.8

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. 1- Say where you think you left the papers. 2- Explain why they are so important3- Tell v. 8
It is now very common that we see the small local businesses are closing and they give way to chain stores and department stores where people mostly prefer to go shopping. There are large malls throughout the city and even in the suburbs, and people commute to these places eagerly to purchase. Although such improvements has recently benefited people, I also see some limited downsides. On the one hand, the new development has helped people in different ways. Firstly, large shopping centers make it easier for people to have everything in front of their eyes. Therefore, it is faster for a customer to find an item and it is simply possible to remember even the unnecessary items that someone might need. secondly, there are a number of brands available which provide a variety of selection for buyers. Thirdly, because of the vast majority of shopping, there would be always some special offers that the customer could benefit from. Despite the facts mentioned above, it could have a merit from economic point of view. There would be an opportunity for employment as there is always a demand for new staff in these places. On the other hand, like many other developments, this kind of evolution might also have negative aspects. Some products are heavily hyped in these large markets and it makes people to be tempted to buy the things that they do not really need. In other words, these places persuade people to be a real consumer which could have negative cultural and economical consequences in societies. The other thing is about the prices that is more negotiable and reasonable in local shops compared to malls and large shopping centers. In conclusion, although the new development has been beneficial in many ways, I believe there are some negative consequences which are worth thinking of.
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commute to these places
eagerly
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. Although such improvements has recently benefited
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special offers that the customer could benefit from. Despite the facts mentioned above, it could have a merit from economic point of view. There would be an opportunity for employment as there is always a demand for new staff in these places.

On the
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markets and it
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people
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people
to be a real consumer which could have
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consequences in societies. The
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thing is about the prices
that is
more negotiable and reasonable in local shops compared to malls and
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large
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shopping
centers.

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, although the new development has been beneficial in
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many
ways, I believe there are
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consequences which are worth thinking of.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. 1- Say where you think you left the papers. 2- Explain why they are so important3- Tell v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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