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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 4
Due to the recent advancement in technology, It is believed that it is much easier to interact with people now than ever before. Although, I do agree with the statement upto some extent but nothing can replace the traditional and cultural face to face conversation in order to live life at its potential. It is quite evident that people nowadays prefer to stay at home and are much more interested in spending their time on the internet. Therefore, The rate at which they are using various online communication website are at its all time high. In addition, There are multiple applications such as facebook, instagram and skype that allows common user to find other users either known or strangers to add in their friend list. For instance, Those living a sedantary lifestyle or busy working a day time job opt for relatively less hard access to the outside world. However, Nothing can replicate the experience of getting to know people under normal real life circumstances. Furthermore, Various Universal studies and researches shows that people feel much more connected to each other when they have a face to face conversation opposite to their counterparts connecting through online communication. Subsquently, People are able to maintain their bond for much longer time if they have regular interaction in form of get together and parties. To sum up, It is easier to make lot of friends online in much less time and minimal effort but it doesn't guarentee to make our life less lonely. On the other hand, Usual real life friendship results in better relationship and provides much more satisfaction.
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is believed
that it is
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much
easier to interact with
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people
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now
than ever
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before
. Although, I do
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agree
with the statement
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some
extent
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but
nothing can replace the traditional and cultural
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face
to
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face
conversation in order to
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live
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life
at its potential.

It is quite evident that
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people
nowadays prefer to stay at home and are
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much
more interested in spending their
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time
on the internet.
Therefore
, The rate at which they are using various online communication website are at its all
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time
high.
In addition
, There are multiple applications such as
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facebook
,
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instagram
and skype that
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allows
common user to find other users either known or strangers to
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add
in their friend list.
For instance
, Those living a
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sedantary
lifestyle or busy working a day
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time
job opt for
relatively
less
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hard
access to the outside world.

However
, Nothing can replicate the experience of getting to know
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people
under normal real
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life
circumstances.
Furthermore
, Various Universal studies and researches
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shows
that
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people
feel
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much
more connected to each other when they have a
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face
to
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face
conversation opposite to their counterparts connecting through online communication.
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Subsquently
,
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People
are able to maintain their bond for
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much
longer
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time
if they have regular interaction in form of
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get
together and parties.

To sum up, It is easier to
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make
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lot of
friends online in
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much
less
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time
and minimal effort
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but
it doesn't
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guarentee
to
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make
our
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life
less lonely.
On the other hand
, Usual real
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life
friendship results in better relationship and provides
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much
more satisfaction.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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