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Many people think that come naturally good leaderships and many people think to get leadership to learn skill. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Many people think that come naturally good leaderships and many people think to get leadership to learn skill. v. 1
One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believe that people born with leadership quality and some people developing the leadership quality from their experienced. There is a widespread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in one’s life. However, I believe no one born with leadership quality and I will discuss both these view in the essay. Firstly, the most preponderant one is that people who play sports they have a leadership quality to lead their team to succeed in the match. Such as, the person who lead their team in bad situation and ability to handle the situation he have a leadership quality. Secondly, sport person can be a leader because he know how to handle their team players in bad situation. For instance, we have a great example of Imran khan who have a leadership quality Pakistan won the 1992 world cup and now became a prime minister of Pakistan of after his 20 years of struggle. On the other hand, people born with leadership quality they don’t have ability to handle the bad situation in their life, such as one of my friend he can’t achieve his goal on his life so he decided to quit his life he can’t handle the situation. To put in a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is indeed a debatable issue which need further analysis and discussion. However, in the light of above discussed and example it would be quite logical to conclude that the sport person can be a leader.
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from their experienced. There is a widespread worry that this will
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and I will discuss both these view in the essay.

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, the most preponderant one is that
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people
who play sports they have a
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leadership
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quality
to lead their team to succeed in the match. Such as, the person who lead their team in
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bad
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and ability to
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, sport person can be a leader
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For instance
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khan who have a
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Pakistan won the 1992 world cup and
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became a prime minister of Pakistan of after his 20 years of struggle.

On the other hand
,
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born with
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they don’t have ability to
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the
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in their
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, such as one of my friend he can’t achieve his goal on his
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he decided to quit his
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he can’t
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the situation.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is
indeed
a debatable issue which need
further
analysis and discussion.
However
, in the light of above discussed and example it would be quite logical
to conclude
that the sport person can be a leader.
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IELTS essay Many people think that come naturally good leaderships and many people think to get leadership to learn skill. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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