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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 2
In the present, people are living in modern life-style and upgrade with new generation or new trends. That our new youth has believes the history his not important to live in that current time. Also, in the past the many situation was created but the young people has not accepted those things. If asked to support, I practically believe that statement and will elaborated further. Generally, our youth are most of information that they do not trust to work in the futures because they have not aware and its also believes in the present situation. Moreover, in the past all mankind has unexpectable experience that wok on the future. For instance, student had to study in their life but some time they have to feel it is worthy. Furthermore, in the school life they had to study about the basic knowledge of they have to study in futures also its not worthy for them. Thus, the past learning is more important to new people. On the other hand, some time they are right about past think to not value in future; However, past learning is worthy for present people. Additionally, current generation believe in change with new trends and life-style. For example, In the past time people are communicating with latter and birds but in the recent time young people accept the new technology that is batter for communication. So, the past is not perfect for the today’s human. To conclude, most of people are not accept history but some cases they have to believe and some other type on they can not trust in past learning because they habited to the new orientation. In this my opinion, both situations are important for these days.
In the present,
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trends. That our
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youth has
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believes
the history his not
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important
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live
in that
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time
.
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past
the
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many situation
was created
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but
the young
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people
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has
not
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accepted
those things. If asked to support, I
practically
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believe
that statement and will elaborated
further
.

Generally
, our youth are
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most of information
that they do not trust to work in the
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futures
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because
they have not aware and its
also
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believes
in the present situation.
Moreover
, in the
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past
all mankind has
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unexpectable
experience that wok on the
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future
.
For instance
, student had to study in their life
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but
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some
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they
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have to
feel it is worthy.
Furthermore
, in the school life they had to study about the basic knowledge of they
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have to
study in
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futures
also
its not worthy for them.
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, the
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past
learning is more
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important
to
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new
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people
.

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,
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some
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they are right about
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to not value in
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future
;
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,
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past
learning is worthy for present
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people
.
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,
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current
generation
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believe
in
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with
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trends and life-style.
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, In the
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past
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time
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people
are communicating with latter and birds
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in the recent
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young
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people
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technology
that is
batter for communication.
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So
, the
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past
is not perfect for the
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today
’s human.

To conclude
, most of
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people
are not accept history
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but
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some
cases they
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have to
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believe
and
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other type on they can not trust in
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learning
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they
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habited
to the
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new
orientation. In this my opinion, both situations are
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important
for these days.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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