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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.7

With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 7
In some countries, people prefer letting their children go to single- sex school for more excellent education. Although there are some advantages of this statement, I would argue that it is better to follow the mixed- sex school. The principal reason for applying to separate school is that the students could concentrate more on their studies and reduce distraction. The battle of the sexes between a team of male and female students could be avoided and prevented at singled- sex school. Additionally, due to natural domain and different directions of development, boy's or girls' school would improve the student's overall abilities in specific subjects. Take mathematics, physics or gymnastic as an example, the boys may keep upper hands on these subjects. By contrast, knowledge, art may be showed up better by girls. Despite the above arguments, I believe that mixed school would be an informed choice for children's enrolment. Students may open their relationship and be more sympathetic or understanding of their friends. Boys or girls both have their own personalities and God- given abilities; therefore; they could learn from each other and experience more skills which is useful for their future. Furthermore, they are consequently not emotionally undeveloped in their relations with the opposite sex. For instance, the male students have to act boldly and help the girl with heavy work as female is weaker. To conclude, both types of school have their own advantages as I have mentioned above. Nevertheless, I would have preferred to go to co- educational school for their broad knowledge and career path.
In
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some
countries,
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people
prefer letting their children go to single-
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sex
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school
for more excellent education. Although there are
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some
advantages of this statement, I would argue that it is better to follow the mixed-
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sex
school.

The principal reason for applying to separate
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school
is that the
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students
could concentrate more on their studies and
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reduce
distraction. The battle of the
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sexes
between a team of male and female
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students
could
be avoided
and
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prevented
at singled-
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sex
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school
.
Additionally
, due to natural domain and
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different
directions of development, boy's or girls'
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school
would
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improve
the student's
overall
abilities in specific subjects. Take mathematics, physics or gymnastic as an example, the boys may
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keep
upper hands on these subjects. By contrast, knowledge, art may be
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showed
up better by girls.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that mixed
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school
would be an informed choice for children's
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enrolment
.
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Students
may open their relationship and be more sympathetic or understanding of their friends. Boys or girls both have their
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own
personalities and God-
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given
abilities;
therefore
; they could learn from each other and experience more
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skills
which is useful for their future.
Furthermore
, they are
consequently
not
emotionally
undeveloped in their relations with the opposite
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sex
.
For instance
, the male
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students
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have to
act
boldly
and
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help
the girl with heavy work as female is weaker.

To conclude
, both types of
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school
have their
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own
advantages as I have mentioned above.
Nevertheless
, I would have preferred to go to co- educational
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school
for their broad knowledge and career path.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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