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With the advent of the internet increasing number of people are shopping online what issues arise from this and how can they be tackled? v.2

With the advent of the internet increasing number of people are shopping online what issues arise from this and how can they be tackled? v. 2
Digital platforms becomes more popular in every field such as shopping, booking, banking, medical treatments. Ratio of purchasing things online is increased rapidly. There are number of causes happen from this. But certain measures could be taken to alleviate this problem. There are several issues arise when people shopping online. The main one is number of Frauds and duplicates taken place during online purchase. It leads to loosing value of money. People can not get worthy item after spending high amount of currency. For instance, Most of the people are ordering branded clothes on shopping websites, but they may get either wrong or duplicate brand in delivery, while some shopping sites does not have a replacing facilities. Therefore that item is not worthy to buy and people feel cheated by money. In addition small shops tend to get closed because people choose to purchase online rather then their nearest shop. It makes greater impact on small retailers. Various possible solutions could be taken in order to tackle above situation. In the first place people should aware about their online purchased products. One should not attracted by huge discounts or any other alluring advertisement shown by online shops. They should check all the aspect of buying. Like, Authentication of sites, Ratings, Demands, Stocks and price. Another Way is They should start buying grocery and homely things from nearer shops. Therefore the get fresh products instantly. It gives chance to earn for local shopkeepers. In conclusion, whereas common issues raise like frauds and less selling items by local shops but these can be tackled by social awareness about shopping products online and giving chance to retailer. it is depend upon person' s mindset about buying things by digital platform.
Digital platforms becomes more popular in every field such as
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shopping
, booking, banking, medical treatments. Ratio of purchasing things
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online
is increased
rapidly
. There are number of causes happen from this.
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But
certain measures could
be taken
to alleviate this problem.

There are several issues arise when
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people
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shopping
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online
. The main one is number of Frauds and duplicates taken place during
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online
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purchase
. It leads to loosing value of money.
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People
can not
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get
worthy item after spending high amount of currency.
For instance
, Most of the
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people
are ordering branded clothes on
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shopping
websites,
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but
they may
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get
either
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wrong
or duplicate brand in delivery, while
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some
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shopping
sites does not have a replacing facilities.
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Therefore
that item is not worthy to
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buy
and
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people
feel cheated by money. In
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addition
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small
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shops
tend to
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get
closed
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because
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people
choose to
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purchase
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online
rather
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then
their nearest
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shop
. It
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makes
greater impact on
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small
retailers.

Various possible solutions could
be taken
in order to tackle above situation. In the
first
place
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people
should aware about their
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online
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purchased
products. One should not
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attracted
by huge discounts or any other alluring advertisement shown by
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online
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shops
. They should
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check
all the aspect of buying. Like, Authentication of sites, Ratings, Demands, Stocks and price. Another Way is They should
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start
buying grocery and homely things from nearer
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shops
.
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Therefore
the
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get
fresh products
instantly
. It gives chance to earn for local shopkeepers.

In conclusion
, whereas common issues raise like frauds and less selling items by local
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shops
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but
these can
be tackled
by social awareness about
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shopping
products
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online
and giving chance to retailer.
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it
is
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depend
upon
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay With the advent of the internet increasing number of people are shopping online what issues arise from this and how can they be tackled? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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