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With the advent of an online library, public libraries will soon be a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

With the advent of an online library, public libraries will soon be a thing of the past. v. 1
It is widely argued that some people come to this world with the potential to excel in particular fields such as sports or music while others do not, others believe that anyone can be trained to become a good sports player or musician. In my opinion, I agree with the latter view that anyone is capable of becoming an expert in his or her field through training and hard work. On one hand, it is claimed that there are people who have talent from their birth for a certain field. These people are from a family that already has a sports or performing arts background. To exemplify, it is commonly observed that most of the popular sports players, actors or musicians come from families that already have a background in their respective fields. However, some people are considered to be the best in their field and do not have a related family background. These people are believed to have certain genetics, either inherited from their parents or formed as a result of mutation, which sets them apart in any particular field. On the other hand, it is believed that anyone can become an expert in any field through training and I agree. In any field of life, it is the skill of individuals which makes them the best in their domain. And a skill can be learned with hours and hours beating on one's craft. For example, The great boxer, Mohammad Ali, became the best boxer of his time through hours of training with dedication. Therefore, anyone can be taught to become a good sports player or performer. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that anyone can become a good sports player or musician through training, hard work, and dedication.
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to this world with the potential to excel
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fields
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sports
or music while others do not, others believe that
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anyone
can
be trained
to
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become
a
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good
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sports
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player
or musician. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the latter view that
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anyone
is capable of becoming an expert in
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field
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training
and
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hard
work.

On one hand, it
is claimed
that there are
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people
who have talent from their birth for a certain
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field
. These
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people
are from a family that already has a
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sports
or performing arts background. To exemplify, it is
commonly
observed that most of the popular
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sports
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players
, actors or musicians
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come
from families that already have a background in their respective
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fields
.
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,
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some
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people
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to be the best in their
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field
and do not have a related family background. These
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people
are believed
to have certain genetics, either inherited from their parents or formed
as a result
of mutation, which sets them apart in any particular field.

On the other hand
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is believed
that
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anyone
can
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become
an expert in any
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training
and I
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. In any
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of life, it is the
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skill
of individuals which
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makes
them the best in their domain. And a
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skill
can
be learned
with hours and hours beating on one's craft.
For example
, The great boxer, Mohammad Ali, became the best boxer of his time
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through
hours of
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training
with dedication.
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,
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anyone
can
be taught
to
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become
a
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good
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sports
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player
or performer.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinions, I
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that
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anyone
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become
a
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good
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sports
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player
or musician
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through
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training
,
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hard
work, and dedication.
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IELTS essay With the advent of an online library, public libraries will soon be a thing of the past. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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