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Talk about a library that you belong to or have visitedYou should say: Where it is located and how the library organizedwho visit the library and why people go therewhen and why you last visited the library… and what rules the library has. v.1

Talk about a library that you belong to or have visitedYou should say: Where it is located and how the library organizedwho visit the library and why people go therewhen and why you last visited the library… and what rules the library has. v. 1
A GOOD WELLNESS PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN EVERYBODY'S LIVES TO LIVE LONGER. IN THE FUTURE, THE INTERMEDIATE MEASURE OF INDIVIDUAL'S WELLNESS WOULD BE DECREASED IN COMPARE TO PRESENT TIME. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT AND ALSO DISCUSS HOW INORGANIC FOODS AND TECHNOLOGY CONTRIBUTE IN DIMINISHING THE FITNESS LEVEL OF FOLKS FURTHER. THE MAJOR REASON IS THE AVAILABILITY OF INORGANIC FOOD WHICH IS CROPPED WITH CERTAIN CHEMICALS SUCH AS, SUFER, UREA, ETC. THIS CHEMICALS ON LOGER PERIOD HAVE DEVASTATING EFFECTS ON HUMEN INTERNAL ORGANS. AS A RESULT, PERSON'S WELNESS LEVEL WILL BE AFFECTED AT SOME POINT. TAKE WHO SURVEY AS EXAMPLE, WORLD HEALTH ORGANISATION SURVEYED THE BOTH THE GENERATION OLD AND NEW. AND THAT SHOWED THAT OLDER GENERATION TEND TO LIVE MORE THAN 80 YEARS IN AVERAGE BECAUSE THEY USED TO EAT HEALTHY ORGANIC FOOD LIKE RICE, CURRY, WHEAT TORTILLAS ETC. WHEREAS TODAY'S DISCANDANTS ARE HABITUAL TO EAT MORE JUNK FOOD WHICH CONSIDERED AS UNHYIGENIC AND INORGANIC. THIS TREND SEEMS TO BE CONTINUE IN THE FUTURE TOO. THUS, FOOD COULD BE THE ONE CAUSE FOR DISCENDED MEDIUM STRENGTH STANDARD OF HUMAN. FURTHERMORE, TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN MAKING PEOPLE MORE INTROVERT. THIS IS BECAUSE OF THE LESS PHYSICAL ACTIVITY DONE BY THEM JUST BY SEATING AT ONE PLACE. THIS LEADS TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS LIKE OBESITY, JOINTS RELATED ISSUES ETC. THIS ARE THE PROBLEM IMPACT THEIR STRENGTH TO MAJOR EXTENT. FOR INSTANCE, INDIAN RESEARCHERS HAVE FOUND THAT PEOPLE WHO SPEND MORE TIME WITHOUT ANY WORKOUT ARE MORE PRONE TO GET DISEASES AT EARLY AGE WHICH WAS MOT USUALLY HAPPENED BEFORE. THUS AS REVOLUTION IN TECHNOLOGY INCREASED MORE HEALTH PROBLEMS ARRIVES WHICH MAKES THE FITNESS STANARD DESREASED. TO SUM UP, FITNESS INDEED CONSIDERED AS ESSENTIAL PART FOR LIVE EXPETANCY SO. INDIVIDUALS SHOULD BE MORE AWARE AND HAVE CONCERN RELATED TO THEIR WELLNESS. THIS COULD BE POSSIBLE IF GOVERNMENT AND INDIVIDUAL TAKE SOME ACTIONS.
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GOOD
WELLNESS PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN EVERYBODY'S
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LIVES
TO
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LIVE
LONGER. IN THE FUTURE, THE INTERMEDIATE MEASURE OF INDIVIDUAL'S WELLNESS WOULD
BE DECREASED
IN COMPARE TO PRESENT TIME. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT AND
ALSO
DISCUSS HOW INORGANIC
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FOODS
AND TECHNOLOGY CONTRIBUTE IN DIMINISHING THE FITNESS LEVEL OF FOLKS
FURTHER
.

THE MAJOR REASON IS THE AVAILABILITY OF INORGANIC
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FOOD
WHICH
IS CROPPED
WITH CERTAIN CHEMICALS SUCH AS,
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SUFER
, UREA, ETC.
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THIS
CHEMICALS ON
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LOGER
PERIOD HAVE DEVASTATING EFFECTS ON
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HUMEN
INTERNAL ORGANS.
AS A RESULT
, PERSON'S
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WELNESS
LEVEL WILL BE
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AFFECTED
AT
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SOME
POINT. TAKE WHO SURVEY AS EXAMPLE, WORLD HEALTH
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ORGANISATION
SURVEYED THE BOTH THE GENERATION
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OLD
AND NEW. AND THAT
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SHOWED
THAT OLDER GENERATION TEND TO
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LIVE
MORE THAN 80 YEARS IN AVERAGE
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BECAUSE
THEY
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USED
TO EAT HEALTHY ORGANIC
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FOOD
LIKE RICE, CURRY, WHEAT TORTILLAS ETC. WHEREAS
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TODAY
'S
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DISCANDANTS
ARE HABITUAL TO EAT MORE JUNK
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FOOD
WHICH CONSIDERED AS
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UNHYIGENIC
AND INORGANIC. THIS TREND SEEMS TO BE CONTINUE IN THE FUTURE TOO.
THUS
,
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FOOD
COULD BE THE ONE CAUSE FOR
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DISCENDED
MEDIUM STRENGTH STANDARD OF HUMAN.

FURTHERMORE
, TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN MAKING
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PEOPLE
MORE INTROVERT. THIS IS
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BECAUSE
OF THE LESS PHYSICAL ACTIVITY DONE BY THEM
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JUST
BY SEATING AT ONE PLACE. THIS LEADS TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS LIKE OBESITY, JOINTS RELATED ISSUES ETC.
The verb 'ARE' is plural. Did you mean "these ARE", "THIS is" or "THIS was"?
THIS ARE
THE PROBLEM IMPACT THEIR STRENGTH TO MAJOR EXTENT.
FOR INSTANCE
, INDIAN RESEARCHERS HAVE FOUND THAT
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PEOPLE
WHO SPEND MORE TIME WITHOUT ANY WORKOUT ARE MORE PRONE TO
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GET
DISEASES AT EARLY AGE WHICH WAS MOT
USUALLY
HAPPENED
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BEFORE
.
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THUS
AS REVOLUTION IN TECHNOLOGY INCREASED MORE HEALTH PROBLEMS ARRIVES WHICH
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MAKES
THE FITNESS
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STANARD
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DESREASED
.

TO SUM UP, FITNESS
INDEED
CONSIDERED AS ESSENTIAL PART FOR
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LIVE
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EXPETANCY
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SO
. INDIVIDUALS SHOULD BE MORE AWARE AND HAVE CONCERN RELATED TO THEIR WELLNESS. THIS COULD BE POSSIBLE IF
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GOVERNMENT
AND INDIVIDUAL TAKE
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SOME
ACTIONS.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Talk about a library that you belong to or have visitedYou should say: Where it is located and how the library organizedwho visit the library and why people go therewhen and why you last visited the library… and what rules the library has. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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