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New Library Hours The administration has announced plans to reduce the number of evening hours the library will be open during the weekdays. We should all support this plan. Most students use the library’s resources during the day, either in between cla v.1

New Library Hours The administration has announced plans to reduce the number of evening hours the library will be open during the weekdays. We should all support this plan. Most students use the library’s resources during the day, either in between cla v. 1
It is often argued that the house is very necessary to live our life safely. Some people might think that the latest houses would consider to make in the same way as before whereas, others consist that local government must permit individuals to build a house in their own style. In my opinion, I personally think that people can pick up the preference of their own way. This essay will address the both views of housing. First of all, tradition represents what country is. When they build a house they might want to maintain the traditions because the traditional culture of housing expresses the identity of the country. For example, when foreigners visit another nations, they might learn other country’s culture from housing because the traditional houses would show them the originality of the country’s culture. Furthermore, it is one of the good ways to describe to preserve the original custom when the same style of houses was built. On the other hand, all people have the freedom to decide their own habitats. In other words, all inhabitants have rights to choose their own style of housing because it is not forbidden to build any types of houses in the modern society. For instance, people might design what sort of places they want to stay and then the constructors build it for them because local officials allow them to do it. Moreover, some traditional houses look very old-fashioned and then nobody might not prefer to live there due to the trend of housing so local council might not support to build the outdated houses. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that preserving the tradition is required we need to encourage individuals to determine the freedom of choosing habitats. It is also effective for the next generation to give them the rights to build their own style of houses.
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before
whereas, others consist that local
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government
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must
permit individuals to
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build
a
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house
in their
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own
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style
. In my opinion, I
personally
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think
that
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people
can pick up the preference of their
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own
way. This essay will address the both views of housing.

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, tradition represents what
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country
is. When they
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build
a
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house
they
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might
want to maintain the traditions
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because
the traditional culture of housing expresses the identity of the
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country
.
For example
, when foreigners visit another nations, they
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might
learn
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other
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country’s
culture from housing
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because
the traditional
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would
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show
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country’s
culture.
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describe
to preserve the original custom when the same
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style
of
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houses
was built
.

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hand, all
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people
have the freedom to decide their
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habitats. In
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other
words, all inhabitants have rights to choose their
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own
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style
of housing
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because
it is not forbidden to
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build
any types of
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houses
in the modern society.
For instance
,
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people
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might
design what sort of places they want to stay and then the constructors
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build
it for them
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because
local officials
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allow
them to do it.
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,
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traditional
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houses
look
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old
-fashioned and then nobody
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not prefer to
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live
there due to the trend of housing
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so
local council
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might
not support to
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build
the outdated
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houses
.

In conclusion
,
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in spite of
the fact that preserving the tradition
is required
we need to encourage individuals to determine the freedom of choosing habitats. It is
also
effective for the
next
generation to give them the rights to
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build
their
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own
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style
of
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houses
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay New Library Hours The administration has announced plans to reduce the number of evening hours the library will be open during the weekdays. We should all support this plan. Most students use the library’s resources during the day, either in between cla v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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