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With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protect places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v.2

With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protect places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v. 2
There is an issue about the occupation of natural lands for accommodating the needs in housing. However, some environmentalists suggest preserving natural wonders. In this essay, I will discuss the pros from this protection and suggest possible solutions reach it. Let us start with the advantageous sides of preserving wild territories. The first advantage is that people will enjoy natural beauty. People often go to the countryside to relax at weekends, but the usage of these picturesque areas under construction would deprive them this change for relaxation. Another positive side is that the country will have more tourists destinations. The economy will benefit from the tourist industry, if the authorities leave wildlife untouched, since the growing number of foreigners is willing to visit other countries with abundant both flora and fauna. Furthermore, the current generation will pass rich natural heritage to the next one. Children will also have the opportunity to see the wildlife in real rather than to watch it sealed in the parks. However, to achieve these beneficial effects, people should take the following measures. Firstly, developers should construct more high-rise buildings. To minimize the exploitation of green areas, people ought to design blocks of apartments for many households instead of one-storey houses for individual families. Secondly, authorities should introduce laws against the development of national parks. Law makers should restrict regulations on the usage of land for construction, so that illegal builders would be unable to log forests as well as dry valuable water deposits. Moreover, developers should also start to use only deserted lands. The government should force construction companies to exploit unwanted areas of land first, so that nature would remain unspoilt longer. In conclusion, human beings will enjoy many advantages, if society adopts the above mentioned measures and, therefore, stop the growth of cities at the expense of wildlife.
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natural
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lands
for accommodating the needs in housing.
However
,
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some
environmentalists suggest preserving
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natural
wonders. In this essay, I will discuss the pros from this protection and suggest possible solutions reach it.

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Let
us
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start
with the advantageous sides of preserving wild territories. The
first
advantage is that
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people
will enjoy
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natural
beauty.
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People
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often
go to the countryside to relax at weekends,
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but
the usage of these picturesque areas under construction would deprive them this
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change
for relaxation. Another
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positive
side is that the country will have more tourists destinations. The economy will benefit from the tourist industry, if the authorities
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leave
wildlife untouched, since the growing number of foreigners is willing to visit other countries with abundant both flora and fauna.
Furthermore
, the
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current
generation will pass rich
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natural
heritage to the
next
one. Children will
also
have the opportunity to
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see
the wildlife in real
rather
than to
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watch
it sealed in the parks.

However
, to achieve these beneficial effects,
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people
should take the following measures.
Firstly
, developers should construct more high-rise buildings. To minimize the exploitation of green areas,
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people
ought to design blocks of apartments for
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many
households
instead
of
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one-storey
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houses
for individual families.
Secondly
, authorities should introduce laws against the development of national parks. Law makers should restrict regulations on the usage of
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land
for construction,
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so
that illegal builders would be unable to log forests
as well
as dry valuable water deposits.
Moreover
, developers should
also
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start
to
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use
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only
deserted
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lands
. The
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government
should force construction
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companies
to exploit unwanted areas of
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land
first
,
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so
that nature would remain
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unspoilt
longer.

In conclusion
, human beings will enjoy
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many
advantages, if society adopts the above mentioned measures and,
therefore
,
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stop
the growth of cities at the expense of wildlife.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protect places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
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