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With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are the of protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v.1

With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are the of protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v. 1
Overpopulation is becoming a major concern in many countries of the world. The rise of population implies more construction and thus, demolition of natural landscape. This essay discusses the benefits of beautiful sights and ways of preserving them. To commence with, there are multiple benefits of natural beautiful sights. They create a sense of positivity and relaxation in mind, which are helpful in reducing stress. This is why many doctors suggest that everyone should go for a trip to a beautiful place to detox their minds from the daily stress. Moreover, such places help boost the economy of a nation. If these are publicised and maintained as tourist spots, then the administration can attract many tourists from within the country and around the world as well. For example, Goa, a state with black sand beaches, is a famous tourist destination. However, the places of natural beauty are getting destroyed to meet the needs of a growing population. Firstly, the administration must run campaigns to control the population growth. People should be taught the importance of a small family. In addition, small families can be given some subsidies or bonus by the government to promote this cause. Secondly, the administration must control the construction in these sites. For example, in Himachal Pradesh, people from other states are not allowed to buy land. They have set up regulation of covering only 50% of the land owned. This helps in maintaining the greenery and controlling the influx of people from the other states. To conclude, there are multiple benefits of preserving natural beauty spots for an individual and a nation. To conserve it, the government must make some stringent laws, so that construction and population growth can be controlled.
Overpopulation is becoming a major concern in
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many
countries of the world. The rise of
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population
implies more construction and
thus
, demolition of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
landscape. This essay discusses the benefits of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
sights and ways of preserving them.

To commence with, there are multiple benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
sights. They create a sense of positivity and relaxation in mind, which are helpful in reducing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
. This is why
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many
doctors suggest that everyone should go for a trip to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
place to detox their minds from the daily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.
Moreover
, such places
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help
boost the economy of a nation. If these are
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publicised
and maintained as tourist spots, then the administration can attract
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many
tourists from within the country and around the world
as well
.
For example
, Goa, a state with black sand beaches, is a
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famous
tourist destination.

However
, the places of
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natural
beauty are getting
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destroyed
to
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meet
the needs of a growing
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population
.
Firstly
, the administration
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must
run campaigns to control the
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population
growth.
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People
should
be taught
the importance of a
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small
family.
In addition
,
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small
families can be
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given
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some
subsidies or bonus by the
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government
to promote this cause.
Secondly
, the administration
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must
control the construction in these sites.
For example
, in Himachal Pradesh,
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people
from other states are not
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allowed
to
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buy
land. They have set up regulation of covering
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only
50% of the land
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owned
. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in maintaining the greenery and controlling the influx of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from the other states.

To conclude
, there are multiple benefits of preserving
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natural
beauty spots for an individual and a nation. To conserve it, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
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make
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some
stringent laws,
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so
that construction and
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population
growth can
be controlled
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay With increasing population and even growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are the of protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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