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Some people think that the effective way to reduce air pollution is to tax companies which cause it Others think that there are better ways to achieve it Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that the effective way to reduce air pollution is to tax companies which cause it Others think that there are better ways to achieve it 1
Ecological hazards are too big to be managed by an individual group or society. Presently, some people are of the opinion that imposing tax on the companies is the most reliable way to curtail air contamination. By contrast, others have conflicting views. Here, I would like to account for both sides with my own perception. There are manifold points to shore up the former view. First and foremost, companies are expected to use eco friendly energy sources if they are charged for the amount of pollution caused during manufacturing. To illustrate, corporates will definitely look for alternative or auto renewable fuels such as C. N. G, wind power, solar energy and bio gas in order to prevent from heavy levy. Companies may avert the excessive usage of petrol, diesel and wood that result into a high volume of air pollution. Besides this, the efficient usage of fuels and energy efficient machines may come into existence as a part of strategy to control air pollution. Thus, the level of air pollution is likely to plunge under the implementation of tax. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there. Numerous points can be mentioned to endorse the latter view. Initially, nowadays, a remarkable contribution in the rise of air pollution is made by private cars and other vehicles. Therefore, people must avoid the excessive usage of private vehicles, instead should prefer to use public transport. What is more, discouraging deforestation, excessive consumerism and the usage of non biodegradable things could be lucrative to restrain this issue. From my notion, both aspects have their own significance. Undeniably, taxing commercial sectors can play a key role to diminish air contamination. However, the importance of other alternatives cannot be underestimated. It is advisable for both people and companies to share joint responsibilities to take over this worrying concern. To recapitulate, air pollution has become a global menace in this fast paced world. Thus, proactive steps ought to be taken to ' nip this evil in the bed' .
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big
to
be managed
by an individual group or society.
Presently
,
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some
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people
are of the opinion that imposing tax on the
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companies
is the most reliable way to curtail
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air
contamination. By contrast, others have conflicting views. Here, I would like to account for both sides with my
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own
perception.

There are manifold points to shore up the former view.
First
and foremost,
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companies
are
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expected
to
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use
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eco friendly
energy sources if they
are charged
for the amount of
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pollution
caused during manufacturing. To illustrate,
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corporates
will definitely look for alternative or auto renewable fuels such as C. N. G, wind power, solar energy and
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bio gas
in order to
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prevent
from heavy levy.
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Companies
may avert the excessive
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usage
of petrol, diesel and wood that result into a high volume of
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air
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pollution
.
Besides
this, the efficient
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usage
of fuels and energy efficient machines may
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come
into existence as a part of strategy to control
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air
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pollution
.
Thus
, the level of
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air
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pollution
is likely to plunge under the implementation of tax.
On the contrary
, opposite wind is
also
there.

Numerous points can
be mentioned
to endorse the latter view.
Initially
, nowadays, a remarkable contribution in the rise of
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air
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pollution
is made
by private cars and other vehicles.
Therefore
,
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people
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must
avoid the excessive
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usage
of private vehicles,
instead
should prefer to
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use
public transport.
What is more
, discouraging deforestation, excessive consumerism and the
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usage
of
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non biodegradable
things could be lucrative to restrain this issue.

From my notion, both aspects have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
significance.
Undeniably
, taxing commercial sectors can play a key role to diminish
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
contamination.
However
, the importance of other alternatives cannot
be underestimated
. It is advisable for both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
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companies
to share joint responsibilities to take over this worrying concern.

To recapitulate,
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air
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pollution
has become a global menace in this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
paced world.
Thus
, proactive steps ought to
be taken
to ' nip this evil in the
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the effective way to reduce air pollution is to tax companies which cause it Others think that there are better ways to achieve it 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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