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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In recent years, life has been pretty hectic, resulting in many people living in modernized societies have eaten fast foods as their main meals. Personally, I would argue that this trend has more drawbacks than benefits. On the one hand, in modernized societies fast food restaurants are very trendy. As they are found in any streets easily and also have reasonable prices, people tend to buy snacks instead of spending time on cooking foods. Moreover, nowadays, every family members spend the majority of their time outside and they come back home at late night, therefore, they do not have enough time to cook. For instance, buying a meal from a fast food establishment takes less than hour, whereas, cooking a food meal at home needs more than an hour. On the other hand, although fast food meals taste delicious, they are high in carbohydrate, fat, and calories. In modern countries like the USA, the vast number of individuals suffer from obesity. Because this nation is very popular for various cuisine chains, thereby, the Americans orders their main meals at fast restaurants rather than cooking at home, which results in gaining weight. Moreover, Fast foods can also change our lifestyle. For example, as these kinds of meals will be ready in a least time leading people to being less patient. If this lifestyle remains trendy, people may not improve their cooking skill and lose this delightful experience in their life. To conclude, although fast food meals make life easier for people in these hectic days, I believe that the disadvantage of these meals outweighs their benefits.
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many
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people
living in modernized societies have eaten
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fast
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foods
as their main
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meals
.
Personally
, I would argue that this trend has more drawbacks than benefits.

On the one hand, in modernized societies
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fast
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food
restaurants are
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very
trendy. As they
are found
in any streets
easily
and
also
have reasonable prices,
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people
tend to
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buy
snacks
instead
of spending
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time
on cooking
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foods
.
Moreover
, nowadays, every family members spend the majority of their
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time
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outside and
they
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come
back home at late night,
therefore
, they do not have
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enough
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time
to cook.
For instance
, buying a
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meal
from a
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fast
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food
establishment takes less than hour, whereas, cooking a
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food
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meal
at home needs more than an hour.

On the other hand
, although
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fast
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food
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meals
taste delicious, they are high in carbohydrate,
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fat
, and calories. In modern countries like the USA, the vast number of individuals suffer from obesity.
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Because
this nation is
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very
popular for various cuisine chains, thereby, the Americans orders their main
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meals
at
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fast
restaurants
rather
than cooking at home, which results in gaining weight.
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,
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Fast
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foods
can
also
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change
our lifestyle.
For example
, as these kinds of
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meals
will be ready in
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a
least
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time
leading
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people
to being less patient. If this lifestyle remains trendy,
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people
may not
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improve
their cooking
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skill
and lose this delightful experience in their life.

To conclude
, although
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fast
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food
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meals
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make
life easier for
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people
in these hectic days, I believe that the disadvantage of these
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meals
outweighs their benefits.
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IELTS essay With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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