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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages. v.1

With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages. v. 1
In the present, there is a lot of people who enjoy fast foodstuff as main meals because of contemporary and hasty lifestyles. Consuming fast cooking has positive effects sometimes, but if the eater consumes it as the important meal frequently, there could be insidious impacts. The prepared food might be appropriate with people who hurry life and need to save time for their daily work. Because most people have limited time and take serious about having a break, waiting to get something to eat or cooking at home. Also, the restaurant could support the client to receive orders by delivery service. In addition, it is one of convenient choices for the beginner cooker to reduce involvement, preparing ingredients steps and risk of accident while cooking. Nevertheless, fast food has a big negative impact that outweighs the benefits. A drawback of them is harmful to the human body and health. Most fast foods do not have nutrient value and contain sugar, salt and oil. This leads to many diseases such as diabetes, cancer, fat and malnutrition. Another drawback is the amount of plastic would be increased from the food package. If there are more fast food consumers, plastic will be higher in the world. In conclusion, Fast food has advantages which can save more time for daily life and good for working human. However, there are still a lot of disadvantages that very malicious with health for both adult and children that we should be deeply concerned. Therefore, it is necessary to be aware of consuming healthier food to avoid the risk of diseases.
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a lot of
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people
who enjoy
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fast
foodstuff as main meals
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because
of contemporary and hasty lifestyles. Consuming
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fast
cooking has
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positive
effects
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sometimes
,
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but
if the eater consumes it as the
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important
meal
frequently
, there could be insidious impacts.

The prepared
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food
might be appropriate with
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people
who hurry life and need to save time for their daily work.
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Because
most
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people
have limited time and take serious about having a break, waiting to
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get
something to eat or cooking at home.
Also
, the restaurant could support the client to receive orders by delivery service.
In addition
, it is one of convenient choices for the beginner cooker to
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reduce
involvement, preparing ingredients steps and
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risk
of accident while cooking.

Nevertheless
,
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fast
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food
has a
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big
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negative
impact that outweighs the benefits. A drawback of them is harmful to the human body and health. Most
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fast
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foods
do not have nutrient value and contain sugar, salt and oil. This leads to
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many
diseases such as diabetes, cancer,
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fat
and malnutrition. Another drawback is the amount of plastic would
be increased
from the
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food
package. If there are more
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fast
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food
consumers, plastic will be higher in the world.

In conclusion
,
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Fast
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food
has advantages which can save more time for daily life and
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good
for working human.
However
, there are
still
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a lot of
disadvantages that
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very
malicious with health for both adult and children that we should be
deeply
concerned.
Therefore
, it is necessary to be aware of consuming healthier
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food
to avoid the
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risk
of diseases.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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