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Will see homeless people in the society, few people support them with food and money and few are against. What is your opinion on this. v. 1

It gives discouragement to see the bag people in modern civilization, such situations are tough to accept. However, most of these live in filthy areas which are non-hygienic for sure, which can cause life threats as well. Street life is terrible. Society and the government were providing few facilities for the homeless even though it is not sufficient, in that more are food and fund related only. These are appreciated, but the other hand, which may increasing laziness and irresponsible nature which is not good towards the nation. Once people habituated with such nature, then they will not realize about the dignity of labour and it could motivate few more people to come on the same dais. Here I want to share an example of GHANA, in this nation the government had provided all the necessaries for free of cost. After some time the country had reached below the poverty line which is really pathetic. Concurrently, we should not leave them in the same condition, along with these facilities, we must analyse the situation and need to take necessary steps to increase their lifestyle. Mostly we need a make them self-sustaining by providing some work or job. I want to share a real success story on such scenario, in Dubai, they opened a program to avoid street life. As part of that program, the government had provided shelter for all homeless along with that they offered work as well within a couple of years all the people got improved morally, socially and financially. I can consider this is a stronger way for human values. To conclude, we should not leave them my providing some food and money, I completely disagree with supporting homeless with only money. In my perception, for an empty stomach, it is better to teach fishing rather than giving a fish.

IELTS essay Will see homeless people in the society, few people support them with food and money and few are against. What is your opinion on this. v.1

It gives discouragement to
see
the bag
people
in modern civilization, such situations are tough to accept.
However
, most of these
live
in filthy areas which are non-hygienic for sure, which can cause life threats
as well
. Street life is terrible. Society and the
government
were providing few facilities for the homeless
even though
it is not sufficient, in that more are food and fund related
only
. These
are appreciated
,
but
the other hand, which may increasing laziness and irresponsible nature which is not
good
towards the nation. Once
people
habituated with such nature, then they will not realize about the dignity of
labour
and it could motivate few more
people
to
come
on the same dais. Here I want to share an example of GHANA, in this nation the
government
had provided all the necessaries for free of cost.
After
some
time the country had reached below the poverty line which is
really
pathetic.
Concurrently
, we should not
leave
them in the same condition, along with these facilities, we
must
analyse
the situation and need to take necessary steps to increase their lifestyle.
Mostly
we need a
make
them self-sustaining by providing
some
work or job. I want to share a real success story on such scenario, in Dubai, they opened a program to avoid street life. As part of that program, the
government
had provided shelter for all homeless along with that they offered work
as well
within a couple of years all the
people
got
improved
morally
,
socially
and
financially
. I can consider this is a stronger way for human values.
To conclude
, we should not
leave
them my providing
some
food and money, I completely disagree with supporting homeless with
only
money. In my perception, for an empty stomach, it is better to teach fishing
rather
than giving a fish.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Essay
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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