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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is a little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is a little can be done to rectify this. v. 2
It is undeniable fact that the media influences our life and opinions. In some countries, the media is controlled exclusively by large companies, in other it is the government that has this control. Neverthless, whoever manages the social media can also manage opinions and attitudes of the public is still a controversial issue. In my opinion, I agree with this idea at extend some but I think that it depends on people who has followed the social information. On the one hand, whoever can control the media also has ultimate control over that is published or broadcasted and what is ommited. They can also add some positive or neative ideas of certain news stories depending on this own feelings about the matter. Therefore, readers' feelings will be follow this news. This is not a new problem, although the issue is perhaps more pressing now that the Internet or TV has allowed these massages to be disseminated even furthur. On the other hand, we should remember that readers have their own ideas and opinions. You can control what is printed but cannot control opinions and attitudes of your readers. For example, Donal Trump, wants to be the next president of the United States of America, even he is among the richest men in this world. Although being a owner of a lot of TV channels, he cannot take advantages of them to have the public' s trust. In addition, people seem to be much more cynical about what they read in the newspaper or hear on the television especially when it comes to the tabloid. In other words, readers can kow they may be being lied to. In concluions, readers should control their feelings when read a newspaper and they can realise that it' s a real news or just lied to.
It is undeniable fact that the
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media
influences our life and
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opinions
. In
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some
countries, the
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media
is controlled
exclusively by large
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companies
, in other it is the
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government
that has this
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control
.
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Neverthless
, whoever manages the social
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media
can
also
manage
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opinions
and attitudes of the public is
still
a controversial issue. In my
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opinion
, I
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agree
with this
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idea
at extend
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some
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but
I
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think
that it depends on
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people
who
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has
followed the social information.

On the one hand, whoever can
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control
the
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media
also
has ultimate
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control
over that
is published
or broadcasted and what is
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ommited
. They can
also
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add
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some
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positive
or
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neative
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ideas
of certain
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news
stories depending on this
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own
feelings about the matter.
Therefore
,
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readers&
#039; feelings will be
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follow
this
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news
. This is not a
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new
problem, although the issue is perhaps more pressing
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now
that the Internet or TV has
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allowed
these massages to
be disseminated
even
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furthur
.

On the other hand
, we should remember that readers have their
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own
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ideas
and
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opinions
. You can
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control
what
is printed
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but
cannot
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control
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opinions
and attitudes of your readers.
For example
,
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Donal
Trump, wants to be the
next
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president of the United States
of America, even he is among the richest
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men
in this world. Although being
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a
owner of
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a lot of
TV channels, he cannot take advantages of them to have the
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public&
#039; s trust.
In addition
,
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people
seem to be much more cynical about what they read in the newspaper or hear on the television
especially
when it
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comes
to the tabloid.
In other words
, readers can
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kow
they may be
being lied
to.

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In
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concluions
, readers should
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control
their feelings when read a
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newspaper and
they can
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realise
that
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it&
#039; s a real
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news
or
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just
lied to.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is a little can be done to rectify this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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