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while recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree. give your opinion with relevant example. v.2

while recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities rather than qualifications and experience. give your opinion with relevant example. v. 2
Applicants, nowadays, go through a lengthy hiring process to acquire a job. Many people believe that interviewers should focus more on personal skills rather than their experience and degrees while recruiting candidates. I agree that interpersonal skills are a prominent aspect of hiring, but they undoubtedly should not be the predominant reason to hire an individual. Due to their expertise in technology and business, employees are considered as the pillars of an organisation. These skills are developed either during college-time or while working on specific business problems, and it is elusive to meet enterprise demand without such expertise. A solution to an issue can be implemented if faced in the past, or it will inevitably lead to a loss in business. Having experience in IT department for many years, I offered many constructive ideas upfront to maximise the business profits with the knowledge gained during higher education. Lastly, hiring someone with incompetent abilities encounter problems in the workplace where the inability of a person reflects the hiring as favouritism. Despite having the above abilities, several interpersonal skills of an applicant can aid in increasing the chance of obtaining a job. First of all, interviewee' s determination can depict their duration in the organisation, which increases the reliability of a resource. Besides, an applicant with team-building or leadership skills strengthens the team members by keeping their focus on an apparent goal. Furthermore, the employee' s positive attitude towards various impediments and bottlenecks could stoke the team to stay enthusiastic and resilient. Eminent professionals with such capabilities are commonly seen in the market these days, where they impart effective solutions to well-known firms with their compounding expertise in technical, business and personal areas. In conclusion, although personal qualities play an imperative role in a recruitment system, person' s experience and education should be considered as the primary requirement, because skills developed through them provides more benefits to a company.
Applicants, nowadays, go through a lengthy
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hiring
process to acquire a job.
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Many
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people
believe that interviewers should focus more on personal
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skills
rather
than their experience and degrees while recruiting candidates. I
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agree
that interpersonal
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skills
are a prominent aspect of
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hiring
,
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but
they
undoubtedly
should not be the predominant reason to hire an individual.

Due to their expertise in technology and
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business
, employees
are considered
as the pillars of an
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organisation
. These
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skills
are developed
either during college-time or while working on specific
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business
problems, and it is elusive to
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meet
enterprise demand without such expertise. A solution to an issue can
be implemented
if faced in the past, or it will
inevitably
lead to a loss in
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business
. Having experience in IT department for
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many
years, I offered
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many
constructive
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ideas
upfront to
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maximise
the
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business
profits with the knowledge gained during higher education.
Lastly
,
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hiring
someone with incompetent abilities encounter problems in the workplace where the inability of a person reflects the
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hiring
as
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favouritism
.

Despite having the above abilities, several interpersonal
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skills
of an applicant can aid in increasing the chance of obtaining a job.
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First of all
,
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interviewee&
#039; s determination can depict their duration in the
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organisation
, which increases the reliability of a resource.
Besides
, an applicant with team-building or leadership
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skills
strengthens the team members by keeping their focus on an apparent goal.
Furthermore
, the
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employee&
#039; s
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positive
attitude towards various impediments and bottlenecks could stoke the team to stay enthusiastic and resilient. Eminent professionals with such capabilities are
commonly
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seen
in the market these days, where they impart effective solutions to well-known firms with their compounding expertise in technical,
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business
and personal areas.

In conclusion
, although personal qualities play an imperative role in a recruitment system,
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person&
#039; s experience and education should
be considered
as the primary requirement,
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because
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skills
developed through them provides more benefits to a
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company
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay while recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities rather than qualifications and experience. give your opinion with relevant example. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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