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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant example. v.11

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant example. v. 11
Recently, the process of recruiting is followed to select the best candidate to work in an organization. It depends on the employer which important characteristics they required in an employee. No doubt, nature of person should also be focused, but educational background and expertise is also necessary to work efficiently in a particular industry. In my opinion, both components have equal importance. Every enterprise has different priorities. If a company is very famous due to his good quality of work, then they will prefer active employee to join their company. Those who have a potential to show outstanding performance, they will get the chance to be a part of that company. A well-known enterprise has proper system to select the best employees for them. For example, KM trading has HR department, they receive resumes of the candidates through email, website, or LinkedIn and then they process full information. CV of a person gives the idea about his profession, certifications and skills. The methodology to select the perfect employee who is free from any harmful act, well-mannered and hardworking get the opportunity to work. Furthermore, if employers only select peoples those who do not have enough knowledge of professional work, they cannot be able to perform any task due to lack of information and expertise. For instance, if there is lack of experience is seen in a candidate, but all other requirements are fulfilled, then a company arranges training facilities for the employees. To sum up, it is mandatory for organizations to hire those, who a eligible to work in a professional environment. An enterprise should concern both areas to get the higher achievement and to run their business smoothly.
Recently, the process of recruiting
is followed
to
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select
the best candidate to
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work
in an organization. It depends on the employer which
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important
characteristics they required in an
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employee
. No doubt, nature of person should
also
be focused
,
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but
educational background and expertise is
also
necessary to
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work
efficiently
in a particular industry. In my opinion, both components have equal importance.

Every enterprise has
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different
priorities. If a
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company
is
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very
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famous
due to his
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good
quality of
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work
, then they will prefer active
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employee
to
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join
their
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company
. Those
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who
have a potential to
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show
outstanding performance, they will
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get
the chance to be a part of that
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company
. A well-known enterprise has proper system to
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select
the best
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employees
for them.

For example
, KM trading has HR department, they receive resumes of the candidates through email, website, or
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LinkedIn and
then they process full information. CV of a person gives the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
about his profession, certifications and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. The methodology to
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select
the perfect
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employee
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who
is free from any harmful act, well-mannered and hardworking
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get
the opportunity to work.

Furthermore
, if employers
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only
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select
peoples those
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who
do not have
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enough
knowledge of professional
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work
, they cannot be able to perform any task due to lack of information and expertise.
For instance
, if there is lack of experience is
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seen
in a candidate,
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but
all other requirements
are fulfilled
, then a
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company
arranges training facilities for the employees.

To sum up, it is mandatory for organizations to hire those,
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who
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a
eligible to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in a professional environment. An enterprise should concern both areas to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the higher achievement and to run their business
smoothly
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant example. v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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