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Nowadays, all new town planning should include public parks, shopping malls and sport facilities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.4

Nowadays, all new town planning should include public parks, shopping malls and sport facilities. v. 4
Designing the layout of a new town is an extremely intricate process. The question what should and should not be included sets the foundation of the town’s identity forever. In my opinion, the addition of public parks, shopping malls and sport facilities is essential to the incubation of community and the encouragement of healthy of lifestyles. I thus agree that these items should be included when a new town is being planned, and I will share examples to prove this. Firstly, public areas and shopping centres help new towns foster a sense of community. For examples, my small Canadian town has a very nice park near its centre. At weekends, the open context of the park environment makes its possible for people to meet each other and create friendships. This sort of organic community building is seen in my home town’s shopping mall too. Shopping malls encourage interaction and thus they are great forums within which people can mingle and have experiences that could evolve into friendships. Thus, the helpful role public parks and shopping malls play in the establishing a new town is clear. Secondly, sports facilities catalyse positive lifestyle choices among town folk. For instance, the central location of my small town’s football pitch is a regular reminder to people passing by that exercise is important. Children in the town are visually aware that sport is accessible to them, and thus they engage in physical activity regularly. This is a clear advantage to town designs that include sport facilities. As the above shows, public parks, shopping malls and sport facilities are helpful in many ways to the establishment of a town. Their inclusion in the planning of a new town is thus highly recommended.
Designing the layout of a
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is an
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intricate process.
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should and should not
be included
sets the foundation of the
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identity forever. In my opinion, the addition of
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public
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parks
,
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shopping
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malls
and
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sport
facilities is essential to the incubation of community and the encouragement of healthy of lifestyles. I
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thus
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that these items should
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when a
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town
is
being planned
, and I will share examples to prove this.

Firstly
,
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public
areas and
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shopping
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centres
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help
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new
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towns
foster a sense of community. For examples, my
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small
Canadian
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town
has a
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very
nice
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park
near its
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centre
. At weekends, the open context of the
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park
environment
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makes
its possible for
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people
to
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meet
each other and create friendships. This sort of organic community building is
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seen
in my home
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town’s
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shopping
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mall
too.
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Shopping
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malls
encourage interaction and
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thus
they are great forums within which
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people
can mingle and have experiences that could evolve into friendships.
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, the helpful role
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public
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parks
and
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shopping
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malls
play in the establishing a
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new
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town
is
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clear
.

Secondly
,
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facilities
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positive
lifestyle choices among
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town
folk.
For instance
, the central location of my
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small
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town’s
football pitch is a regular reminder to
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people
passing by that exercise is
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important
. Children in the
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town
are
visually
aware that
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sport
is accessible to them, and
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thus
they engage in physical activity
regularly
. This is a
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clear
advantage to
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town
designs that include
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sport
facilities.

As the above
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shows
,
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public
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parks
,
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shopping
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malls
and
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sport
facilities are helpful in
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many
ways to the establishment of a
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. Their inclusion in the planning of a
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new
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town
is
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thus
highly
recommended.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, all new town planning should include public parks, shopping malls and sport facilities. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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