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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples v.7

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples v. 7
Recent decades have witnessed a burgeoning growth of numerous industries. Therefore, recruiting the right person for the position is very crucial to the development of enterprises. According to the research done by various executives from different industries, some people say, most of the employees are well-heeled from their educational qualifications and experiences but lacking from the personal qualities and conversely. In my opinion while being well-qualified and having relevant experience is important or even essential, but having the personality factors with sufficient qualifications and experience is the key. To begin with the conventional approach of checking a potential employees via curriculum vitae, Linkedin and etc. Which influence the employer to look at the educational background rather than checking the personal characteristics that will always lead to hire the nerdy personalities for the companies. Hiring a well-experienced and educated person who is known as a skilled worker is not an unwise decision, but there may be situations where these employees could not handle the soft skills like team oriented work, flexibility, positive attitudes which will cause to decrease the productivity and the quality of the company. On the other hand, In a company the majority should be sociable people because in an office environment most people can get on the job training and not necessarily need an advanced degree or extensive experience to perform their duties. Instead, what is more important is their ability to work as a team with their co-workers and avoid workplace conflicts as well as increase the productivity of the company. This makes sense to hire people who have both soft skills and qualifications. As to conclude, having a balanced staff with sufficient qualifications and suitable personal characteristics will always keep the company in a good position by defining the company as a great place to work. Therefore, each and every employer should follow a different methodology that will cover most of the personal and professional qualifications while recruiting a candidate.
Recent decades have witnessed a burgeoning growth of numerous industries.
Therefore
, recruiting the right person for the position is
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very
crucial to the development of enterprises. According to the research done by various executives from
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different
industries,
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some
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people
say, most of the employees are well-heeled from their educational
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qualifications
and
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experiences
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but
lacking from the
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personal
qualities and
conversely
. In my opinion while being well-qualified and having relevant
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experience
is
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important
or even essential,
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but
having the personality factors with sufficient
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qualifications
and
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experience
is the key.

To
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begin
with the conventional approach of checking a potential
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employees
via curriculum vitae,
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Linkedin
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and etc
. Which influence the employer to look at the educational background
rather
than checking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
characteristics that will always lead to hire the nerdy personalities for the
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companies
. Hiring a well-experienced and educated person who
is known
as a skilled worker is not an unwise decision,
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but
there may be situations where these employees could not handle the soft
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skills
like team oriented work, flexibility,
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positive
attitudes which will cause to decrease the productivity and the quality of the
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company
.

On the other hand
, In a
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company
the majority should be sociable
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people
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because
in an office environment most
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people
can
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get
on the job training and not
necessarily
need an advanced degree or extensive
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experience
to perform their duties.
Instead
,
what is more
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important
is their ability to work as a team with their co-workers and avoid workplace conflicts
as well
as increase the productivity of the
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company
. This
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makes
sense to hire
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people
who have both soft
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skills
and qualifications.

As
to conclude
, having a balanced staff with sufficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualifications
and suitable
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personal
characteristics will always
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keep
the
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company
in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
position by defining the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
as a great place to work.
Therefore
, each and every employer should follow a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
methodology that will cover most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
and professional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualifications
while recruiting a candidate.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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