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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v.3

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 3
There is a notion that during hiring of a new employee, employer must focus more on personal attributes rather than his related technical skills and education. Although attitude of an individual towards his job is important, but I believe that having right educational background and experience weighs more. In this essay I will explain why having experience and appropriate qualification is more important. While the selection of a new employee number of factors needs to be considered, some of which are dedicated, well-disciplined and honesty along with proper technical skill and experience. If any of these factors is lacking, it will seriously impact the performance of a person at the workplace. For example a fresh salesman who is soft spoken and has good behaviour, but no exposure of dealing with customers cannot outperform an experienced salesman with an educational background in marketing. Some jobs require certain set of skills in order to accomplish the given task successfully. If the person performing the job does not have adequate experience and knowledge, he might not be able to meet the requirements for the job. A doctor with strong academic background, such as specialization and certification with a proven work record history will be always better choice, compared with a fresh graduate. In order to conclude, although personal properties play an important role in the performance of an employee, but it is skill and knowledge which matters most.
There is a notion that during hiring of a new employee, employer
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focus more on personal attributes
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than his related technical
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skills
and education. Although attitude of an individual towards his
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job
is
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important
,
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but
I believe that having right educational background and
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experience
weighs more. In this essay I will
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explain
why having
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experience
and appropriate qualification is more
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important
.

While the selection of a new employee number of factors needs to
be considered
,
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some
of which
are dedicated
, well-disciplined and honesty along with proper technical
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skill
and
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experience
. If any of these factors is lacking, it will
seriously
impact the performance of a person at the workplace.
For example
a fresh salesman who is
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soft spoken
and has
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good
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behaviour
,
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but
no exposure of dealing with customers cannot outperform an experienced salesman with an educational background in marketing.

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Some
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jobs
require certain set of
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skills
in order to accomplish the
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given
task
successfully
. If the person performing the
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job
does not have adequate
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experience
and knowledge, he might not be able to
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meet
the requirements for the
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job
. A doctor with strong academic background, such as specialization and certification with a proven work record history will be always better choice, compared with a fresh graduate.

In order
to conclude
, although personal properties play an
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important
role in the performance of an employee,
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but
it is
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skill
and knowledge which matters most.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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