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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v.6

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 6
Recent decades have witnessed a burgeoning growth of numerous industries; therefore, recruiting the right person for the position is crucial to the development of enterprises. But how do we determine if a person is the best fit? Advocates of conventional recruitment methods opine that this candidate must have sufficient experience and qualifications needed for that job. Nevertheless, some people argue that the candidates’ personal qualities cannot be ignored. In my view, both components are of equal importance. To begin with, the conventional approach of checking potential workers’ qualifications via their resumes, LinkedIn profiles, issued qualifications and certifications from authorised organisations is vital. Apparently, whenever we submit a job application, we are always required to attach a CV while a cover letter is optional. Without a decent qualification, even if that candidate’s personal characteristics are suitable, the enterprise will need to carry out lots of skill trainings eventually. On the other hand, occasionally during an interview some HR officers ignore the significance of assessing how candidates’ individual qualities can fit in the company. Employers should assess not only candidates’ qualifications, but also their enabling skills, ethics and value propositions. The more an employee’s personal qualities fit into a company’s culture and values, the more he or she is motivated to contribute to that company’s vision. KPMG is a great example of evaluating candidates’ personal qualifications and skills by utilising a game-based assessment process, followed by a video interview. This methodology enables a comprehensive assessment, and is embraced by many companies nowadays. To summarise, employers should assess both personal characteristics and formal qualifications when people are recruited as each of these elements has its own vital contribution to make in talent-seeking enterprises.
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how do we determine if a person is the best fit? Advocates of conventional recruitment methods opine that this
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candidate
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must
have sufficient experience and
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qualifications
needed for that job.
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people
argue that the
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candidates’
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personal
qualities cannot be
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ignored
. In my view, both components are of equal importance.

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begin
with, the conventional approach of checking potential workers’
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qualifications
via their resumes, LinkedIn profiles, issued
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qualifications
and certifications from
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authorised
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organisations
is vital.
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qualification
, even if that
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candidate’s
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personal
characteristics are suitable, the enterprise will need to carry out lots of
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skill
trainings
eventually
.

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during an interview
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HR officers
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the significance of assessing how
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candidates’
individual qualities can fit in the
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company
. Employers should assess not
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only
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candidates’
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qualifications
,
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also
their enabling
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skills
, ethics and value propositions. The more an employee’s
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personal
qualities fit into a
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company’s
culture and values, the more he or she
is motivated
to contribute to that
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company’s
vision. KPMG is a great example of evaluating
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candidates’
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personal
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qualifications
and
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skills
by
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utilising
a game-based assessment process, followed by a video interview. This methodology enables a comprehensive assessment, and
is embraced
by
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many
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companies
nowadays.

To
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summarise
, employers should assess both
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personal
characteristics and formal
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qualifications
when
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people
are recruited
as each of these elements has its
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vital contribution to
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make
in talent-seeking enterprises.
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IELTS essay While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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