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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.8

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 8
Most people spend half of their life in work, and they believe that having a better career is always needed to have a joyful life. In this essay, we will discuss the two main factors that lead to Job fulfilment like organization culture and flexible environment; and also we will discuss some of the basic job expectations of workers. Firstly, in the aspect of profession fulfilment it is likely to change with each and every individual. There will be few common factors that will bring the sense of completeness for everyone, they are the work culture and relaxation in work timing is to name but few. These are the areas that will make the worker to feel their company is good enough, motivate them to work with full commitment and improve their sense of loyalty over their organization. For instance, in some of the IT sectors they introduced flexible work timing and also relaxed some of their strict rules like eliminating formal clothing; in order to make their work place friendly. As a result the productivity has improved to a great extent. Thus, having a relaxed work culture will be a benefit for the organization as well as to their staffs. In the last few decades, the way that the company treats their workers have changed drastically in a good way. They become friendlier and they brought many changes, thereby all the staffs have realized their basic necessities were accepted. For example, in Pondicherry government sectors, the labour union has demanded for early retirement and the government also fulfilled them recently. For the above said reason it is evident that the wage earners are having needs that are basic and companies also doing their best by accepting. To conclude, in today’s world, it is necessary to have a job carry their livelihood find a job and these also have great impact on their private life also. In this essay we discussed that work culture and Flexi work timing will help the employee to attain peacefulness at work. We also discussed that the companies are striving hard to meet the immediate needs of their employee.
Most
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people
spend half of their life in
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work
, and they believe that having a better career is always needed to have a joyful life. In this essay, we will discuss the two main factors that lead to
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Job
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fulfilment
like organization
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culture
and flexible environment; and
also
we will discuss
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some of the
basic
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job
expectations of workers.

Firstly
, in the aspect of profession
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fulfilment
it is likely to
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change
with each and every individual. There will be few common factors that will bring the sense of completeness for everyone, they are the
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work
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culture
and relaxation in
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work
timing is to name
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but
few. These are the areas that will
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make
the worker to feel their
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company
is
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good
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enough
, motivate them to
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work
with full commitment and
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improve
their sense of loyalty over their organization.

For instance
, in
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some of the
IT sectors they introduced flexible
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work
timing and
also
relaxed
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some
of their strict
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rules
like eliminating formal clothing; in order to
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make
their
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work
place friendly.
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As
a result the productivity has
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improved
to a great extent.

Thus
, having a relaxed
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work
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culture
will be a benefit for the organization
as well
as to their staffs.

In the last few decades, the way that the
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company
treats their workers have
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changed
drastically
in a
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good
way. They become
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friendlier and
they brought
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many
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changes
, thereby all the staffs have realized their
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basic necessities
were
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accepted
.

For example
, in Pondicherry
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government
sectors, the
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labour
union has demanded for early retirement and the
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government
also
fulfilled them recently. For the above said reason it is evident that the wage earners are having needs that are basic and
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companies
also
doing their best by accepting.

To conclude
, in
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today
’s world, it is necessary to have a
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job
carry their livelihood find a
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job
and these
also
have great impact on their private life
also
. In this essay we discussed that
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work
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culture
and
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Flexi
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work
timing will
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help
the employee to attain peacefulness at
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work
. We
also
discussed that the
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companies
are striving
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hard
to
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meet
the immediate needs of their employee.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 8

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
354 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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