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Some people believe online reading materials should be only used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe online reading materials should be only used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 1
Enormous amounts of internet access made people to believe in online reading and also they strongly suggest that it is a good way for children to learn, but others believe that the hard copies of books should be used. In the following paragraph I will provide both points and give my personal opinion. Certainly, online materials can be used anywhere and anytime. It makes children more time to read while doing other activities like travelling. In electronic copies of books, the words are connected with some links such as dictionary, meaning of the word. In this way, they can get to know the meaning of that particular word. And also students are attracted towards colourful and easy access online materials. Nevertheless, while spending more time on reading online materials, it creates an impact on children's health. But that will not be the case while reading in printed materials. For instance, online reading can cause eye strain or neck stiffness. By reading in printed materials, children can stay away from technology a few hours a day. The major disadvantages of printed materials, we cannot get the meaning of unknown words and less environmentally friendly. At the conclusion, when comparing online reading with printed materials, online reading is more environmentally friendly, colourful, attractive and interactive. I personally believe that online readers should be used by children to learn to read.
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. In the following paragraph I will provide both points and give my personal opinion.

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online
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can be
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anywhere and anytime. It
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children
more time to read while doing other activities like travelling. In electronic copies of books, the words
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with
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some
links such as dictionary, meaning of the
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. In this way, they can
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to know the meaning of that particular
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. And
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students
are attracted
towards
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colourful
and easy access
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online
materials.

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, while spending more time on
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reading
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online
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, it creates an impact on children's health.
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reading
in
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printed
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.
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online
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can cause eye strain or neck stiffness. By
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reading
in
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printed
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materials
,
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children
can stay away from technology a few hours a day. The major disadvantages of
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printed
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materials
, we cannot
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get
the meaning of unknown words and less
environmentally
friendly.

At the conclusion, when comparing
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online
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reading
with
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printed
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,
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online
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reading
is more
environmentally
friendly,
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colourful
, attractive and interactive. I
personally
believe that
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online
readers should be
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used
by
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children
to learn to read.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should be only used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
228 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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