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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v.10

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 10
Recently, the procedure of recruiting is accompanied to pick out the best candidate to overall performance in an organization. It relies upon on the agency which necessary characteristics they required in an employee. No doubt, the nature of a person needs to additionally be focused, however academic heritage and know-how is also essential to job effectively in a unique industry. In my opinion, both factors have equal importance. Every corporation has distinct priorities. If an association is very well-known due to his precise first-rate of production, then they will opt for the active worker to be part of their company. Those who have a practicable to exhibit magnificent performance, they will get the chance to be a phase of that company. A well-known enterprise has perfect device to pick out the high-quality personnel for them. For example, KM buying and selling has HR department, they get hold of the resumes of the candidates through email, website, or LinkedIn and then they method full information. CV of a man or woman gives the thought about his profession, certifications and skills. The methodology to select the best worker who is free from any detrimental act, well-mannered and hardworking get the probability to production. Furthermore, if employers only pick peoples those who do not have sufficient know-how to professional work, they cannot be able to perform any assignment due to lack of data and expertise. For instance, if there is a lack of ride is viewed in a candidate, however all other necessities are fulfilled, then an affiliation arranges training facilities for the employees. To sum up, it is mandatory for agencies to hire those, who an eligible to project in an expert environment. An agency should challenge each area to get the greater success and to run their commercial enterprise smoothly.
Recently, the procedure of recruiting
is accompanied
to pick out the best candidate to
overall
performance in an organization. It relies upon on the agency which necessary characteristics they required in an employee. No doubt, the nature of a person needs to
additionally
be focused
,
however
academic heritage and know-how is
also
essential to job
effectively
in a unique industry. In my opinion, both factors have equal importance.

Every corporation has distinct priorities. If an association is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well-known due to his precise
first
-rate of production, then they will opt for the active worker to be part of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. Those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
have a practicable to exhibit magnificent performance, they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the chance to be a phase of that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. A well-known enterprise has perfect device to pick out the high-quality personnel for them.

For example
, KM buying and selling has HR department, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
hold of the resumes of the candidates through email, website, or
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
LinkedIn and
then
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'they'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
they method
full information. CV of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
or woman gives the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
about his profession, certifications and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. The methodology to select the best worker
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
is free from any detrimental act, well-mannered and hardworking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the probability to production.

Furthermore
, if employers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
pick peoples those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
do not have sufficient know-how to professional work, they cannot be able to perform any assignment due to lack of data and expertise.
For instance
, if there is
Possible agreement error. The noun ride seems to be countable; consider using: "a lack of rides".
a lack of ride
is viewed
in a candidate,
however
all other necessities
are fulfilled
, then an affiliation arranges training facilities for the employees.

To sum up, it is mandatory for agencies to hire those,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
an eligible to project in an expert environment. An agency should challenge each area to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the greater success and to run their commercial enterprise
smoothly
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
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IELTS essay While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 10

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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