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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. v.26

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. v. 26
Nowadays, the debate whether young people should have a gap year after finishing high school to work or travel has caused a ruckus among myriads of parents. As almost everything in our world has its merits yet is overshadowed by its drastic consequences. In my opinion, I acquiesce that its pros outweigh its cons. With emphasis to my opinion, there is a vast plethora of merits regarding this highly disputatious issue. First and foremost, not only does it coerce young people to be more independent, but it also help them to feel more the value of money. For example, students may not feel how it is hectic to earn money until they personally experience it. Although others may have different standpoint, I personally believe that these are lagniappes that hordes of people, whether 7, 17 or 70 are reluctant to lose. Despite the obvious positives, one cannot turn a blind eye on the incontestable negatives. Firstly the most salient downside is that it may seem as a waste of time and superfluous to delay the university. Even though it may have a tiny impact on the academic level as students have to skip one year, I adamantly claim that on the other hand, students will benefit from this experience by gaining life lessons as being responsible and managing their time effectively. For example, maybe learning new life lessons may be more beneficial than scientific lessons. In conclusion, I have a resolute unwavering advocate that encouraging young people to develop themselves by going the extra mile is the bedrock of SUCCESS! Contrary, I suggest that parents should motivate them to do so and keep asking about them regularly. Furthermore, they may aid them financially in the first couple of months until they become fully independent and able to finance their needs.
Nowadays, the debate whether young
people
should have a gap year after finishing high school to work or travel has caused a ruckus among myriads of parents. As almost everything in our world has its merits
yet
is overshadowed
by its drastic consequences. In my opinion, I acquiesce that its pros outweigh its cons.

With emphasis to my opinion, there is a vast plethora of merits regarding this
highly
disputatious issue.
First
and foremost, not
only
does it coerce young
people
to be more independent,
but
it
also
help
them to feel more the value of money.
For example
, students may not feel how it is hectic to earn money until they
personally
experience it. Although others may have
different
standpoint, I
personally
believe that these are lagniappes that hordes of
people
, whether 7, 17 or 70 are reluctant to lose.

Despite the obvious positives, one cannot turn a blind eye on the incontestable negatives.
Firstly
the most salient downside is that it may seem as a waste of time and superfluous to delay the university.
Even though
it may have a tiny impact on the academic level as students
have to
skip one year, I
adamantly
claim that
on the other hand
, students will benefit from this experience by gaining life lessons as being responsible and managing their time
effectively
.
For example
, maybe learning new life lessons may be more beneficial than scientific lessons.

In conclusion
, I have a resolute unwavering advocate that encouraging young
people
to develop themselves by going the extra mile is the bedrock of SUCCESS! Contrary, I suggest that parents should motivate them to do
so
and
keep
asking about them
regularly
.
Furthermore
, they may aid them
financially
in the
first
couple of months until they become
fully
independent and able to finance their needs.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
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