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While parking his car in the lane outside your home, a neighbour has caused some damage to your car. You have decided to write to this neighbour. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter: – say why you are writing– describe the damage caused to your car v.1

While parking his car in the lane outside your home, a neighbour has caused some damage to your car. You have decided to write to this neighbour. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter: – say why you are writing– describe the damage caused to your car v. 1
Individuals prefer to have processed foodstuff every day and everywhere and this has had numerous well-being issues on their lifestyle and eating habits. This essay strongly agrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will first, discuss that people will suffer from various well-being issues and diseases when eating fast cuisine and further, outline that processed meal affects the overall growth and immunity of individuals as they do not get the required nutrients. It is clear that people who are more inclined to have fast cuisine rather than home cooked cuisine suffer from various physical and mental issues which affect their overall life in a negative manner. This is to say, fast foods are rich in calories and fats, which leads to people having obesity and cardiovascular diseases. As a result, this reduces the life span of people and they are not able to build a successful future. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that more than 80 percent of people who eat junk food most of the time have deteriorating well-being. Apart from this, people who eat less nutritious meal, their body does not absorb any nutrients and vitamins, which are essential for the body to fight against unwanted foreign bodies and viruses. In other words, people eating junk food suffer from a weak immune system and mental problems. However, this would not have been possible if they would have home cooked food which is rich in all the necessary minerals important for the body. As a consequence, they are less capable of building a prosperous career. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 60 percent of people who eat fast meal either have low immunity or some psychological problems. To conclude, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that people who have junk meals is a negative development as they not only suffer from health problems or infections, but also affects their overall growth and the immune system.
Individuals prefer to have processed foodstuff every day and everywhere and this has had numerous well-being issues on their lifestyle and eating habits. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with the aforementioned statement. This essay will
first
, discuss that
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people
will
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suffer
from various well-being issues and diseases when eating
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fast
cuisine and
further
, outline that processed
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meal
affects the
overall
growth and immunity of individuals as they do not
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get
the required nutrients.

It is
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clear
that
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people
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who
are more inclined to have
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fast
cuisine
rather
than home cooked cuisine
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suffer
from various physical and mental issues which affect their
overall
life in a
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negative
manner. This is to say,
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fast
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foods
are rich in calories and fats, which leads to
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people
having obesity and cardiovascular diseases.
As a result
, this
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reduces
the life span of
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people and
they are not able to build a successful future. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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people
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who
eat junk
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food
most of the time have deteriorating well-being.

Apart from this,
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people
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who
eat less nutritious
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meal
, their
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body
does not absorb any nutrients and vitamins, which are essential for the
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body
to fight against unwanted foreign
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bodies
and viruses.
In other words
,
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people
eating junk
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food
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suffer
from a weak immune system and mental problems.
However
, this would not have been possible if they would have home cooked
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food
which is rich in all the necessary minerals
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important
for the
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body
. As a consequence, they are less capable of building a prosperous career. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of
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people
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who
eat
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fast
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meal
either have low immunity or
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some
psychological problems.

To conclude
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that
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people
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who
have junk
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meals
is a
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negative
development as they not
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only
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suffer
from health problems or infections,
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but
also
affects their
overall
growth and the immune system.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay While parking his car in the lane outside your home, a neighbour has caused some damage to your car. You have decided to write to this neighbour. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter: – say why you are writing– describe the damage caused to your car v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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