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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v.32

You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v. 32
There is no doubt that the communication has changed a lot over the years. These days, traditional means like letter writing is obsolete. I believe modern tech has made our society advanced, and brought us closer, so we do not need letters anymore. Firstly, the way we communicate has improved by technology. This is because we have a lot of options now. For instance, we can now send an email or text message that will reach within a matter of seconds, compared to half a decade ago, where the post would take around a week. In addition, businesses have benefitted immensely from this. The operations that would take months are now completed in a few days. Businesses can now call abroad for free, this was really expensive a decade ago. On top of that, huge machines were needed. Secondly, the modern technology is much more convenient. This is because of the advent of mobile phones. For example, we can easily send thousands of messages from our mobile. The same activity was done by visiting the post office in the past. Furthermore, these days big companies are paying more attention to the user experience than ever before. To put the huge size of these companies into perspective, Whatsapp sends ten million messages in a minute, this is how convenient the new systems are. To conclude, communications will continue to evolve, and I think if it id for the betterment of mankind, we should embrace it.
There is no doubt that the communication has
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changed
a lot over the years. These days, traditional means like letter writing is obsolete. I believe modern tech has made our society advanced, and brought us closer,
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so
we do not need letters anymore.

Firstly
, the way we communicate has
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improved
by technology. This is
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because
we have
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a lot of
options
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now
.
For instance
, we can
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now
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send
an email or text message that will reach within a matter of seconds, compared to half a decade ago, where the post would take around a week.
In addition
, businesses have
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benefitted
immensely
from this. The operations that would take months are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
now
completed in a few days. Businesses can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
now
call abroad for free, this was
really
expensive a decade ago.
On top of that
, huge machines
were needed
.

Secondly
, the modern technology is much more convenient. This is
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because
of the advent of mobile phones.
For example
, we can
easily
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send
thousands of messages from our mobile. The same activity
was done
by visiting the post office in the past.
Furthermore
, these days
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big
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companies
are paying more attention to the user experience than ever
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before
. To put the huge size of these
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companies
into perspective,
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Whatsapp
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sends
ten million messages in a minute, this is how convenient the new systems are.

To conclude
, communications will continue to evolve, and I
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think
if
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it id
for the betterment of mankind, we should embrace it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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