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While many people say that parents are the best teachers, others simply state that teachers and our own experience are our best teachers. Who do you thinks is our best teacher? v.2

While many people say that parents are the best teachers, others simply state that teachers and our own experience are our best teachers. Who do you thinks is our best teacher? v. 2
Undoubtedly, parents can teach their children more efficiently than the others because both of them know their children very well and have a greater bond with the kids.   While the lessons learnt from our teachers, friends and our own experiences are very important; none can exceed the parents as teachers. This essay intends to assess this statement in depth as follows. Parents get sufficient amount of time to spend with their children rather than teachers. During this time, they teach each and everything about the world as well as academic subjects as much as they can. Moreover, they clarify the doubts of children in various aspects which are the required quality of an excellent teacher. Such activities help children to increase their wider knowledge considerably. Secondly, parents know their children from the earliest stage of life. Therefore, they can easily evaluate both strong and weak areas of their own children. This helps parents significantly to guide their children to overcome their weakness which is the important responsibility of an ideal teacher. Furthermore, in this way, parents can also motivate their children to learn more lessons which are very useful for their bright future. For all these reasons, I can say that parents can be perfect teachers without any doubt. However, there are those who believe that all parents cannot teach their children due to their poor knowledge, lack of social skills and so on. They also contend that only certain parents can become the best teachers for their children. Nevertheless, I think that parents can give many moral lessons to their children in spite of poor academic qualifications. In conclusion, although all parents cannot perform as good teachers in academic areas, they can teach all other lessons from their life experience which are also crucial for the future life of the young generation.
Undoubtedly
,
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parents
can
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teach
their
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children
more
efficiently
than the others
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because
both of them know their
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children
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very
well and have a greater bond with the kids.
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While the
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lessons
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learnt
from our
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teachers
, friends and our
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own
experiences are
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very
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important
; none can exceed the
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parents
as
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teachers
. This essay intends to assess this statement in depth as follows.

Parents
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get
sufficient amount of time to spend with their
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children
rather
than
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teachers
. During this time, they
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teach
each and everything about the world
as well
as academic subjects as much as they can.
Moreover
, they clarify the doubts of
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children
in various aspects which are the required quality of an excellent
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teacher
. Such activities
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help
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children
to increase their wider knowledge
considerably
.

Secondly
,
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parents
know their
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children
from the earliest stage of life.
Therefore
, they can
easily
evaluate both strong and weak areas of their
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own
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children
. This
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helps
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parents
significantly
to guide their
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children
to overcome their weakness which is the
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important
responsibility of an ideal
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teacher
.
Furthermore
, in this way,
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parents
can
also
motivate their
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children
to learn more
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lessons
which are
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very
useful for their bright future. For all these reasons, I can say that
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parents
can be perfect
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teachers
without any doubt.

However
, there are those who believe that all
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parents
cannot
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teach
their
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children
due to their poor knowledge, lack of social
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skills
and
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so
on. They
also
contend that
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only
certain
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parents
can become the best
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teachers
for their
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children
.
Nevertheless
, I
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think
that
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parents
can give
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many
moral
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lessons
to their
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children
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in spite of
poor academic qualifications.

In conclusion
, although all
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parents
cannot perform as
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good
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teachers
in academic areas, they can
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teach
all other
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lessons
from their life experience which are
also
crucial for the future life of the young generation.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay While many people say that parents are the best teachers, others simply state that teachers and our own experience are our best teachers. Who do you thinks is our best teacher? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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