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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? v.9

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? v. 9
Undoubtedly, food is the basic requirement of all human beings. Since people nowadays make different kinds of foods very easily, it greatly influences people’s life positively due to various reasons as follows. To begin with, unlike in the past, easier methods of cooking save a considerable amount of time and energy of people which they utilize efficiently for their individual and professional sectors to achieve goals. In this way, people’s life standard has developed to a great extent. For example, according to the research of Indian Employment Sector in India in 2014, there was a remarkable increase in the number of women workers compared to previous years due to decreased household works mainly cooking. Moreover, people’s health status has improved. To explain, in the past, people often avoided cooking in their own homes due to their busy life. But now situation has changed as anyone can prepare food easily without any training. This trend has enabled them to make homely and healthy food instead of having fast foods from restaurants. For instance, youngsters and even children make healthy and tasty foods as they like with the help of advanced home appliances easily. These activities make enable youth people more confident and independent to cook food rather than approaching parents or elders. In all these ways people’s lifestyle developed remarkably. In conclusion, the way of cooking has a significant role in individual life directly or indirectly. So in this modern era, people are always following easy preparation methods of cooking for the enhancement of present lifestyle.
Undoubtedly
,
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food
is the basic requirement of all human beings. Since
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people
nowadays
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make
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different
kinds of
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foods
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very
easily
, it
greatly
influences
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people’s
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life
positively
due to various reasons as follows.

To
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begin
with, unlike in the past, easier methods of cooking save a considerable amount of time and energy of
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people
which they utilize
efficiently
for their individual and professional sectors to achieve goals. In this way,
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people’s
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life
standard has developed to a great extent.
For example
, according to the research of Indian Employment Sector in India in 2014, there was a remarkable increase in the number of women workers compared to previous years due to decreased household works
mainly
cooking.

Moreover
,
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people’s
health status has
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improved
. To
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explain
, in the past,
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people
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often
avoided cooking in their
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own
homes due to their busy
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life
.
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But
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now
situation has
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changed
as anyone can prepare
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food
easily
without any training. This trend has enabled them to
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make
homely and healthy
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food
instead
of having
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fast
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foods
from restaurants.
For instance
, youngsters and even children
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make
healthy and tasty
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foods
as they like with the
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help
of advanced home appliances
easily
. These activities
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make
enable youth
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people
more confident and independent to cook
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food
rather
than approaching parents or elders. In all these ways
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people’s
lifestyle developed
remarkably
.

In conclusion
, the way of cooking has a significant role in individual
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life
directly
or
indirectly
.
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So
in this modern era,
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people
are always following easy preparation methods of cooking for the enhancement of present lifestyle.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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