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Which one do you think makes friendship stronger enjoying good times together or talking about problems and supporting each other v.1

Which one do you think makes friendship stronger enjoying good times together or talking about problems and supporting each other v. 1
IN THIS CONTEMPORARY ERA, EVERYONE WANTS TO EARN MORE AND MORE MONEY FOR MAKING THEIR LIFE BETTER AND LUXURIOUS BUT, THE MINORITY OF MASSES HAVE A HIGH RATE OF SALARY. ALTHOUGH SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS GOOD FOR THE ECONOMY WHILE OTHERS SAID THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD RESTRICT PAY SCALE RATE TO A CERTAIN LEVEL. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PROS AND CONS OF THE ABOVE PROCLAMATION IN SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS, ALONG WITH MY OPINION. TO INITIATE WITH, HAVING AN EXTREMELY HIGH WAGE AFFECTS THE COUNTRY IN VARIOUS WAYS. FORST AND FOREMOST, BODIES WITH HIGH PROFITS PAY A HUGE AMOUNT OF CAPITAL AS A TAX TO THE REGIME AUTHORITIES, WHICH IS USED TO DEVELOP THE INFRASTRUCTURE OF THE NATION AND FURTHER HELPS TO BUILD NEW FACILITIES TO ORDINARY PERSONALITIES. SECONDLY, INDIVIDUALS ALSO HELP OTHERS BY PROPOSING THEIR SMALL AMOUNT OF MONEY TO START UP THEIR OWN BUSINESS. FOR INSTANCE, MANY MILLIONAIRES FINANCIALLY HELP THEIR FRIENDS TO STAND ON THEIR FEET. ON THE OTHER SIDE, IF ONE HOLDS A GREAT QUANTITY OF CURRENCY, THUS OTHERS LOSE MANY OPPORTUNITIES. TO ILLUSTRATE, THE BUSINESSMAN SAVES A LIONS SHARE TO OVERCOME THE LOSSES THEY TAKE, WHICH RESULT IN IMBALANCE SOCIETY ONE IS RICH AND THE OTHER IS POOR. MOREOVER, INDIVIDUALS WITH A HIGH STANDARD DO NOT WANT TO MAKE CONNECTIONS WITH A LOWER STANDARD, WHICH LEADS TO RACISM AMONG PEOPLE. TO CONCLUDE, I OPINE THAT HIGHER AUTHORITIES ALLOW PAYROLLS TO A LEVEL WHICH IS IN FAVOUR OF EVERY CITIZEN AND REDUCE THE CRIME RATE AND DISCRIMINATION BETWEEN PEOPLE.
IN THIS CONTEMPORARY ERA, EVERYONE WANTS TO EARN MORE AND MORE MONEY FOR MAKING THEIR LIFE BETTER AND LUXURIOUS
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BUT
, THE MINORITY OF MASSES HAVE A
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HIGH
RATE OF SALARY. ALTHOUGH
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SOME
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PEOPLE
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THINK
THAT IT IS
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GOOD
FOR THE ECONOMY WHILE OTHERS SAID THE
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GOVERNMENT
SHOULD RESTRICT PAY SCALE RATE TO A CERTAIN LEVEL. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PROS AND CONS OF THE ABOVE PROCLAMATION IN SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS, ALONG WITH MY OPINION.

TO INITIATE WITH, HAVING AN
EXTREMELY
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HIGH
WAGE AFFECTS THE COUNTRY IN VARIOUS WAYS.
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FORST
AND FOREMOST, BODIES WITH
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HIGH
PROFITS PAY A HUGE AMOUNT OF CAPITAL AS A TAX TO THE REGIME AUTHORITIES, WHICH IS
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USED
TO DEVELOP THE INFRASTRUCTURE OF THE NATION AND
FURTHER
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HELPS
TO BUILD NEW FACILITIES TO ORDINARY PERSONALITIES.
SECONDLY
, INDIVIDUALS
ALSO
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HELP
OTHERS BY PROPOSING THEIR
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SMALL
AMOUNT OF MONEY TO
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START
UP THEIR
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OWN
BUSINESS.
FOR INSTANCE
,
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MANY
MILLIONAIRES
FINANCIALLY
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HELP
THEIR FRIENDS TO STAND ON THEIR FEET.

ON THE
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OTHER
SIDE, IF ONE HOLDS A GREAT QUANTITY OF CURRENCY,
THUS
OTHERS LOSE
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MANY
OPPORTUNITIES. TO ILLUSTRATE, THE BUSINESSMAN SAVES A LIONS SHARE TO OVERCOME THE LOSSES THEY TAKE, WHICH RESULT IN IMBALANCE SOCIETY ONE IS RICH AND THE
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OTHER
IS POOR.
MOREOVER
, INDIVIDUALS WITH A
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HIGH
STANDARD DO NOT WANT TO
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MAKE
CONNECTIONS WITH A LOWER STANDARD, WHICH LEADS TO RACISM AMONG
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PEOPLE
.

TO CONCLUDE
, I OPINE THAT HIGHER AUTHORITIES
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ALLOW
PAYROLLS TO A LEVEL WHICH IS IN
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FAVOUR
OF EVERY CITIZEN AND
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REDUCE
THE CRIME RATE AND DISCRIMINATION BETWEEN
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PEOPLE
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Which one do you think makes friendship stronger enjoying good times together or talking about problems and supporting each other v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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