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Which one do you think has the greatest impact on protecting the environment? Government regulation, organizations, or individual efforts. v.2

Which one do you think has the greatest impact on protecting the environment? Government regulation, organizations, or individual efforts. v. 2
It is no doubt that nowadays people put more emphasis on protecting the environment. However, we don’t have an agreement regarding who should lead people to protect the environment. Should the government set it a rule requiring people to follow certain rules? Do organizations or individual efforts provide a better result? From my perspective, the government has the greatest impact on protecting the environment. In the first place, only government is able to provide facilities necessary for protecting the environment. With the proper facility, it is possible for people to change their original behave. For example, twenty years ago, our mayor began to set up beautiful recycle bins in every park and encouraged people to reduce the amount of the garbage by recycling them in those bins. People found them interesting so soon after the bins were set, recycle became a well-adapted concept. Nevertheless, organizations and individual efforts do not have the power to provide and set the facilities. As a result, they do not make impacts like the government does. In addition, only government has the power to provide various educational programs to the public regarding protecting the environment. To be more specific, the government can ask schools to teach kids about protecting the earth. Also, it can increase the awareness of protecting the environment by posting notices on TV or on road signs. In contrast, although organizations can also provide educational programs, they have limited resources and outreach to thrive their programs. Not to mention, an individual is not capable of conducting big educational projects. Consequently, the government makes the greatest impact because it is able to provide numerous educational programs to a wide range of people. Last but not least, the government has the authority to make it a rule and force people to follow the rules. For example, to reduce the amount of plastic bags which harm the environment, our government prohibits stores from giving free plastic bags. People have to pay to get the plastic bags. Furthermore, if anyone breaks the law, the person will be fined with a big penalty. The policy works well and many people bring their fabric bags to shop now. However, organizations and individuals have no such authority to influence people. In conclusion, I believe the government has the greatest power to influence people to protect the environment. It is able to provide necessary facilities and education to the public in order to increase the awareness. Moreover, it owns the power to force people to follow the policy to protect the Earth. Neither organization nor individual can achieve them.
It is no doubt that nowadays
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people
put more emphasis on
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protecting
the
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environment
.
However
, we don’t have an agreement regarding who should lead
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people
to protect the
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environment
. Should the
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government
set it a
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rule
requiring
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people
to follow certain
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rules
? Do
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organizations
or
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individual
efforts
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provide
a better result? From my perspective, the
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government
has the greatest impact on
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protecting
the environment.

In the
first
place,
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only
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government
is able to
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provide
facilities necessary for
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protecting
the
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environment
. With the proper facility, it is possible for
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people
to
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change
their original behave.
For example
, twenty years ago, our mayor began to set up
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beautiful
recycle bins in every park and encouraged
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people
to
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reduce
the amount of the garbage by recycling them in those bins.
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People
found them interesting
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so
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soon
after the bins
were set
, recycle became a well-adapted concept.
Nevertheless
,
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organizations
and
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individual
efforts do not have the
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power
to
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provide
and set the facilities.
As a result
, they do not
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make
impacts like the
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government
does.

In addition
,
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only
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government
has the
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power
to
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provide
various
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educational
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programs
to the public regarding
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protecting
the
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environment
. To be more specific, the
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government
can ask schools to teach kids about
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protecting
the earth.
Also
, it can increase the awareness of
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protecting
the
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environment
by posting notices on TV or on road signs.
In contrast
, although
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organizations
can
also
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provide
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educational
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programs
, they have limited resources and outreach to thrive their
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programs
. Not to mention, an
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individual
is not capable of conducting
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big
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educational
projects.
Consequently
, the
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government
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makes
the greatest impact
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because
it is able to
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provide
numerous
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educational
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programs
to a wide range of
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people
.

Last
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but
not least, the
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government
has the authority to
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make
it a
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rule
and force
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people
to follow the
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rules
.
For example
, to
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reduce
the amount of plastic
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bags
which harm the
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environment
, our
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government
prohibits stores from giving free plastic
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bags
.
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People
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have to
pay to
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get
the plastic
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bags
.
Furthermore
, if anyone breaks the law, the person will be
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fined
with a
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big
penalty. The policy works well and
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many
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people
bring their fabric
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bags
to shop
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now
.
However
,
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organizations
and
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individuals
have no such authority to influence
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people
.

In conclusion
, I believe the
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government
has the greatest
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power
to influence
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people
to protect the
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environment
. It is able to
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provide
necessary facilities and education to the public in order to increase the awareness.
Moreover
, it
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owns
the
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power
to force
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people
to follow the policy to protect the Earth. Neither
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organization
nor
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individual
can achieve them.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Which one do you think has the greatest impact on protecting the environment? Government regulation, organizations, or individual efforts. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
429 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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