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Which of the following jobs or careers do you think would be most rewarding? University professorEnvironmental scientistNewspaper journalistChoose one career and explain why you think it would be most rewarding. Use details and examples to support your ans v.1

Which of the following jobs or careers do you think would be most rewarding? University professorEnvironmental scientistNewspaper journalistChoose one career and explain why you think it would be most rewarding. Use details and examples to support your ans v. 1
It is important to consider the various ways in which various ethnic groups live with one another. Some people believe that a person’s tradition and attribute can be deciphered from their preference of clothes. This essay agrees that is likely to know much about a person’s way of life and attitude from their choice of dressing. To begin with, style of clothing is specific to different cultures in Africa especially in Nigeria. The various ethnic groups have their cultural style as well as their behaviours. For example, The Nation recently reported that it would be easier to recognize the tribe of a person the way they dress while they were in an occasion compared to when they are not dressed in their native attire. Nonetheless, if they cannot be identified based on their clothing patterns, then much information about a person’s tradition cannot be discerned through their choices of clothes. Additionally, people from another culture rarely put on the attires of the place they are currently residing. They probably want to preserve their own tradition by maintaining their own form of dressing. For instance, a recent poll by the Delta State Ministry of Arts and Cultures found that 95% of settlers are likely to maintain their traditions rather than adopting the once of their current place of residence. Notwithstanding, if they had adopted the once of their current place of living, much cannot be said about their values. In conclusion, due to people regularly maintaining their own traditional clothing styles and not having interest in adopting the once in their place of residence, I believe that it is possible to speak a lot about a person’s culture and attitude.
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important
to consider the various ways in which various ethnic groups
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live
with one another.
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people
believe that a
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person’s
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tradition
and attribute can
be deciphered
from their preference of clothes. This essay
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agrees
that is
likely to know much about a
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person’s
way of life and attitude from their choice of dressing.

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begin
with, style of clothing is specific to
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different
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cultures
in Africa
especially
in Nigeria. The various ethnic groups have their cultural style
as well
as their
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behaviours
.
For example
, The Nation recently reported that it would be easier to recognize the tribe of a
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person
the way they dress while they were in an occasion compared to when they are not dressed in their native attire. Nonetheless, if they cannot
be identified
based on their clothing patterns, then much information about a
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person’s
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tradition
cannot
be discerned
through their choices of clothes.

Additionally
,
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people
from another
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culture
rarely put on the attires of the
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place
they are
currently
residing. They
probably
want to preserve their
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own
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tradition
by maintaining their
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own
form of dressing.
For instance
, a recent poll by the Delta State Ministry of Arts and
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Cultures
found that 95% of settlers are likely to maintain their
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traditions
rather
than adopting the once of their
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current
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place
of residence. Notwithstanding, if they had adopted the once of their
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current
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place
of living, much cannot
be said
about their values.

In conclusion
, due to
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people
regularly
maintaining their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
traditional clothing styles and not having interest in adopting the once in their
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place
of residence, I believe that it is possible to speak a lot about a
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person’s
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culture
and attitude.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Which of the following jobs or careers do you think would be most rewarding? University professorEnvironmental scientistNewspaper journalistChoose one career and explain why you think it would be most rewarding. Use details and examples to support your ans v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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