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Some students prefer to live on campus in a dormitory. Others prefer to live in an apartment or house off campus. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.1

Some students prefer to live on campus in a dormitory. Others prefer to live in an apartment or house off campus. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1
Information technology has grown inadvertently in the last 2. It is altering the day-to-day activities of our routine life. Software technology has made living easy and entertaining. Meanwhile, it is making people lazy. This essay will discuss why the merits of artificial intelligence supersede the associated demerits. Advantages are plenty. Firstly, customers can buy groceries and garments of different brands as well as qualities just by pressing a single button, sitting indoors. In addition, for relaxation and entertainment, an individual can log into YouTube or online gaming websites to spend some time. Moreover, computer science has grown so immensely that employees do their office work without going to actual workplace, by connecting remotely. To exemplify, a recent survey conducted by NASSCOM (National Association of Software and Services Companies) not only shows a 70 percentage increase in the overall online shopping trend in the last 5 years but also exorbitant rise in the number of workers preferring work from home since 2010. Admittedly, there are many benefits that, it has become part and parcel of everyone's life, knowingly or unknowingly. However, main concern due to advances in information science is that people are becoming increasingly sluggish. Online shops are used so much that even items such as soap shampoo and vegetables are e-tailed, even though same products can be purchased from nearby stores. Furthermore, instead of preparing one's food at home, they get it house delivered from their favourite restaurants. For example, according to a news report, more than 70 percent of staff members in Bangalore order lunch online, regardless of having numerous restaurants nearby. Undoubtedly, society is slowly becoming slaves to technology. Application of software systems has increased immensely in everyone's life. To conclude, even though software engineering has few drawbacks, overall it is a positive development.
Information technology has grown
inadvertently
in the last 2. It is altering the day-to-day activities of our routine life.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Software
technology has made living easy and entertaining. Meanwhile, it is making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
lazy. This essay will discuss why the merits of artificial intelligence supersede the associated demerits.

Advantages are
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plenty
.
Firstly
, customers can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
groceries and garments of
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different
brands
as well
as qualities
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just
by pressing a single button, sitting indoors.
In addition
, for relaxation and entertainment, an individual can log into YouTube or
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online
gaming websites to spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time.
Moreover
, computer science has grown
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so
immensely
that employees do their office work without going to actual workplace, by connecting
remotely
. To exemplify, a recent survey conducted by
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NASSCOM
(National Association of
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Software
and Services
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Companies
) not
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only
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shows
a 70 percentage increase in the
overall
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online
shopping trend in the last 5 years
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but
also
exorbitant rise in the number of workers preferring work from home since 2010.
Admittedly
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits that, it has become part and parcel of everyone's life,
knowingly
or
unknowingly
.

However
, main concern due to advances in information science is that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are becoming
increasingly
sluggish.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Online
shops are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much that even items such as soap shampoo and vegetables are e-tailed,
even though
same products can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
from nearby stores.
Furthermore
,
instead
of preparing one's food at home, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
delivered from their
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favourite
restaurants.
For example
, according to a news report, more than 70 percent of staff members in Bangalore order lunch
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
, regardless of having numerous restaurants nearby.
Undoubtedly
, society is
slowly
becoming slaves to technology.

Application of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
systems has increased
immensely
in everyone's life.
To conclude
,
even though
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software
engineering has few drawbacks,
overall
it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some students prefer to live on campus in a dormitory. Others prefer to live in an apartment or house off campus. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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