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Which of the following characteristics is the most important for a student to be successful? Self-motivating, hard-working, intelligent. v.1

Which of the following characteristics is the most important for a student to be successful? Self-motivating, hard-working, intelligent. v. 1
Language translation by computers has considerably improved in recent years. Some people claim children need not learn a foreign language. I completely disagree with this statement because, they need to explore different languages, in order to increase their cognitive ability and as they grow they might need to interact with people of different languages. Firstly, language skill is an important milestone in a child's development because it improves the cognitive ability. In addition, the brain becomes sharp if multiple languages are learnt in paediatric age. Although, softwares can translate languages for children still they cannot improve their language learning skills. Therefore, the little ones must be encouraged to master an additional language. For example, my cousin can speak fluently in German language and hence, she can excel in her career. Moreover, children learn new things at a fast pace similarly, speaking in a new language might not be difficult for them. Secondly, children may encounter people from different parts of the world in future, because of globalisation. So, they must be well prepared at an early age, by motivating them to concentrate on a foreign language. Further, as a grownup if they need to migrate to a different country, this knowledge will help them to be social in a foreign land. For instance, my primary education was in English I had an advantage to become friendly with people in a foreign land when I moved to London. In conclusion, language translation by computers might not help children in the long run nevertheless, children need to improve their language skills in order to thrive in a distant place.
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claim
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foreign
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language
. I completely disagree with this statement
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need
to explore
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different
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languages
, in order to increase their cognitive ability and as they grow they might
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need
to interact with
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people
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different
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language
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skill
is an
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important
milestone in a child's development
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it
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improves
the cognitive ability.
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, the brain becomes sharp if multiple
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languages
are
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in
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age. Although,
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softwares can
translate
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languages
for
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children
still
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skills
.
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must
be encouraged
to master an additional
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language
.
For example
, my cousin can speak
fluently
in German
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language
and
hence
, she can excel in her career.
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,
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children
learn new things at a
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fast
pace
similarly
, speaking in a new
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language
might not be difficult for them.

Secondly
,
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children
may encounter
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people
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different
parts of the world
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,
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globalisation
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well prepared
at an early age, by motivating them to concentrate on a
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foreign
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language
.
Further
, as a grownup if they
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need
to migrate to a
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different
country, this knowledge will
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help
them to be social in a
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foreign
land.
For instance
, my primary education was in English I had an advantage to become friendly with
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people
in a
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foreign
land when I
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moved
to London.

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,
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translation by computers might not
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help
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children
in the long run
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children
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to
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improve
their
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language
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skills
in order to thrive in a distant place.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
To have another language is to possess a second soul.
Charlemagne

IELTS essay Which of the following characteristics is the most important for a student to be successful? Self-motivating, hard-working, intelligent. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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