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Where would you most like to live? Describe this place and explain why you would like to live there. v.1

Where would you most like to live? Describe this place and explain why you would like to live there. v. 1
It seems that members of the family now could not gather together in meals. This essay will provide some explanation relate to this trend, and it is effect on family bonding. A few reasons can be given to explain why many people choose to eat out instead of at home. Firstly, because of the busy working schedule, people cannot find time to enjoy a meal with their families. Moreover, the differences in work schedule do not allow people to spend time eating meals with their family. For instance, young people often tend to eat with friends or colleague because it suits their timetable. Second, people usually want to save time by eating out instead of cooking at home. In addition, food culture is becoming more diverse, and it attracts people. Thus, there is a tendency for people to like going at restaurants rather than eat meals together at home. In terms of the drawbacks, if people do not eat meals together, this leads to close-knit family will disappear. For example, meal with family is a place where people share and talk together. It is help members of the family to bond with each other. Furthermore, quality time with families help children to shape their personalities during the formative years. Another disadvantage, when we eat out, we cannot see how they cook food so, the food is contaminated by bacteria. Nowadays, many people are getting poisoned due to food is not ensuring quality, so people need to buy fresh food, and own process food their family. In conclusion, people tend to like eating out rather than at home. I believe that it creates a weak family bond, and this trend has some drawback on family life.
It seems that members of the
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. This essay will provide
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explanation
relate to this trend, and it is effect on
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bonding.

A few reasons can be
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explain
why
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people
choose to
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eat
out
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of at home.
Firstly
,
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because
of the busy working schedule,
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people
cannot find
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time
to enjoy a
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meal
with their
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families
.
Moreover
, the differences in work schedule do not
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allow
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people
to spend
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time
eating
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meals
with their
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family
.
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, young
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people
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tend to
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eat
with friends or colleague
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because
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people
usually
want to save
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time
by eating out
instead
of cooking at home.
In addition
,
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food
culture is becoming more diverse, and it attracts
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people
.
Thus
, there is a tendency for
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people
to like going at restaurants
rather
than
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eat
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meals
together at home.

In terms of the drawbacks, if
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people
do not
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eat
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meals
together, this leads to close-knit
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family
will disappear.
For example
,
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meal
with
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family
is a place where
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people
share and talk together. It is
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help
members of the
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family
to bond with each other.
Furthermore
, quality
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time
with
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families
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help
children to shape their personalities during the formative years. Another disadvantage, when we
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eat
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out
, we cannot
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see
how they cook
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food
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so
, the
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food
is contaminated
by bacteria. Nowadays,
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many
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people
are getting poisoned due to
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food
is not ensuring quality,
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so
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people
need to
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buy
fresh
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food
, and
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own
process
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food
their family.

In conclusion
,
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people
tend to like eating out
rather
than at home. I believe that it creates a weak
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family
bond, and this trend has
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some
drawback on
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family
life.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Where would you most like to live? Describe this place and explain why you would like to live there. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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