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Some people think that first impressions of an individual’s character are usually correct. Other people hesitate to judge a person on first meeting him or her, because they think first impressions are can be misleading. Compare these two views v.1

Some people think that first impressions of an individual’s character are usually correct. Other people hesitate to judge a person on first meeting him or her, because they think first impressions are can be misleading. Compare these two views v. 1
Wearing uniforms at work areas is debatable. Some people claim that all employees must wear uniforms at work places, however others feel it is unnecessary. This essay will discuss on both the arguments and explain why it is superior to wear uniform at work stations. Mainly wearing uniform gives a sense of equality among the workers and when people wear dresses of their choice to offices it can distract others. On one side, people feel happy when they wear different costumes every day at work places. In fact, some of them go to work so that they get to explore various trends of clothing. However, such trendy cloths cause significant distractions at offices. Moreover, the efficiency of the employees will reduce as they tend to spend more time in discussing on these matters. For instance, many software engineers are not productive at work instead they are keen on wearing contemporary style of clothing. Therefore, wearing cloths of their choice at offices might give individual happiness, but overall it may affect the growth of a company significantly. On the other side, uniform at work areas gives an identity to a person similar to white aprons worn by all doctors globally. Because, no one will be judged based on the type of cloths being worn at companies. In addition, uniforms protect an individual against harmful or hazardous substances at certain workplaces. For instance, my cousin feels proud to wear her office uniform everyday because, she is recognised in the public that she is an employee of one of the multinational company. Even recent studies at Harvard university revealed that, companies which implemented uniforms to the employees noticed a considerable hike in the overall growth of the company. In conclusion, despite the fact that wearing cloths of choice at companies can bring happiness, but it may also distract others. Therefore, by wearing uniforms the employees are not only protected against harmful substances, but they will become more productive at work areas.
Wearing
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claim that all
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employees
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must
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places,
however
others feel it is unnecessary. This essay will discuss on both the arguments and
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explain
why it is superior to
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wear
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uniform
at
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stations.
Mainly
wearing
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uniform
gives a sense of equality among the workers and when
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people
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wear
dresses of their choice to
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offices
it can distract others.

On one side,
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people
feel happy when they
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wear
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different
costumes every day at
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work
places. In fact,
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some
of them go to
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work
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so
that they
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get
to explore various trends of clothing.
However
, such trendy
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cloths
cause significant distractions at
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offices
.
Moreover
, the efficiency of the
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employees
will
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reduce
as they tend to spend more time in discussing on these matters.
For instance
,
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many
software engineers are not productive at
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work
instead
they are keen on wearing contemporary style of clothing.
Therefore
, wearing
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cloths
of their choice at
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offices
might give individual happiness,
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but
overall
it may affect the growth of a
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company
significantly
.

On the other side,
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uniform
at
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work
areas gives an identity to a person similar to white aprons worn by all doctors globally.
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Because
, no one will
be judged
based on the type of
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cloths
being worn
at
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companies
.
In addition
,
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uniforms
protect an individual against harmful or hazardous substances at certain workplaces.
For instance
, my cousin feels proud to
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wear
her
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office
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uniform
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everyday
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because
, she is
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recognised
in the public that she is an
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employee
of one of the multinational
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company
. Even recent studies at
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Harvard university
revealed that,
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companies
which implemented
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uniforms
to the
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employees
noticed a considerable hike in the
overall
growth of the
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company
.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that wearing
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cloths
of choice at
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companies
can bring happiness,
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but
it may
also
distract others.
Therefore
, by wearing
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uniforms
the
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employees
are not
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only
protected against harmful substances,
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but
they will become more productive at
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work
areas.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some people think that first impressions of an individual’s character are usually correct. Other people hesitate to judge a person on first meeting him or her, because they think first impressions are can be misleading. Compare these two views v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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