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It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and t v.1

It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and t v. 1
Traffic congestion and pollution issues have become a serious worldwide problem. It is often said that extending the price of fuel is the possible way to manage traffic and pollution problems. However, growing the price of oil is not an outstanding solution and there are other measures to tackle these issues. On the one hand, there are some people who believe that raising the price of fuel is the best way to reduce traffic and pollution problems. As a result, this is not an effective measure and also causes a short-term solution to decrease issues. An increment of petrol prices, however, people will continue to use it due to the fact that there are no other feasible choices available to run their vehicles. Consequently, this does not bring a whole successful image in solving those issues and escalates commodity and transportation costs. On the other hand, there is a wide range of solutions to be taken into account. First and foremost, advancing the public transport is one of the alternative ways to cut down an emission rate of unhealthy gases related to air pollution. Encouraging people to use public transportation by providing cheap fares can lessen the number of vehicles which decreases traffic difficulty in many areas. Therefore, this can be an effective method compared with increasing the expense of oil. In conclusion, the cost expansion of oil is not an acceptable reason to solve traffic and pollution problems. Conversely, the most practical solution to solve the aforementioned issues is public transport. Also, the government should invest in public transport and provide reasonable prices for public transportation.
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Traffic
congestion and
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pollution
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issues
have become a serious worldwide
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problem
. It is
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often
said that extending the
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price
of fuel is the possible way to manage
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traffic
and
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pollution
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problems
.
However
, growing the
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price
of oil is not an outstanding
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solution
and there are other measures to tackle these issues.

On the one hand, there are
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some
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people
who believe that raising the
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price
of fuel is the best way to
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reduce
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traffic
and
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pollution
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problems
.
As a result
, this is not an effective measure and
also
causes a short-term
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solution
to decrease
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issues
. An increment of petrol
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prices
,
however
,
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people
will continue to
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use
it due to the fact that there are no other feasible choices available to run their vehicles.
Consequently
, this does not bring a whole successful image in solving those
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issues
and escalates commodity and transportation costs.

On the other hand
, there is a wide range of
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solutions
to
be taken
into account.
First
and foremost, advancing the
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public
transport is one of the alternative ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down an emission rate of unhealthy gases related to air
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pollution
. Encouraging
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people
to
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use
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public
transportation by providing
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cheap
fares can lessen the number of vehicles which decreases
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traffic
difficulty in
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many
areas.
Therefore
, this can be an effective method compared with increasing the expense of oil.

In conclusion
, the cost expansion of oil is not an acceptable reason to solve
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traffic
and
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pollution
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
.
Conversely
, the most practical
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solution
to solve the aforementioned
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issues
is
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public
transport.
Also
, the
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government
should invest in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport and provide reasonable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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