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q1. What is the best class you have taken in school. Why was it the best in your opinion. Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

q1. What is the best class you have taken in school. Why was it the best in your opinion. Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
Nowadays, in this contemporary world, there is most of sophisticated technology that it cannot be denied by anyone else, especially it always give a great benefit to everyone who needs. However, that thing is truly cannot replace the function of school for any student. In this case, I personally believe that it is better to get schooled, which is also improving the other skills than at home. First and foremost, it is obvious that the school is providing a huge benefit except academic subjects such as communication skill, social skill through leadership, socialization, friendship and many others. Those kinds of skills cannot be figured out at home. By means that the students still need to gain more knowledge at school rather than through the internet, while the additional learning could be deserved out of the school. Furthermore, the more about using internet as priority for study will also lead to the serious cause, since, its influence the low of the health condition of the teenagers. Some pupils could suffer from the irritation of their eyes, for instance, as they always depend more on using the gadget for study which need a plenty of time. On the other hand, the riches of information to learn about is not only available through the internet, but also the teachers are also having a broad knowledge to share and to guide the student the best in their level of academic. As a result, they will attain some of more evaluation of the teachers instead of study from the internet, which cannot properly render them in improving their learning. Besides, the machinery cannot be fully trusted and guaranteed to provide the best education and academic subjects. There are certain subjects included, yet it is not complete as what provided in the school. Hence, the right information is not always being true for the students as well as it will not extremely encourage their achievement. By way of conclusion, although, some individuals prefer to use the internet for extent their insight, yet it cannot be totally trusted to depend on. As I would state that the school could guarantee the best result for the young people by having studied face to face and open to open throughout the period.
Nowadays, in this contemporary world, there is most of sophisticated technology that it cannot
be denied
by anyone else,
especially
it always
Did you mean "gives"?
give
a great benefit to everyone who needs.
However
, that thing is
truly
cannot replace the function of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
.
In this case
, I
personally
believe that it is better to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
schooled, which is
also
improving the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
than at home.

First
and foremost, it is obvious that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
is providing a huge benefit except academic subjects such as communication
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
, social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
through leadership, socialization, friendship and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
others. Those kinds of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
cannot
be figured
out at home. By means that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
still
need to gain more knowledge at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
rather
than through the internet, while the additional learning could
be deserved
out of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Furthermore
, the more about using internet as priority for study will
also
lead to the serious cause, since, its influence the low of the health condition of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
pupils could suffer from the irritation of their eyes,
for instance
, as they always depend more on using the gadget for study which need a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of time.

On the other hand
, the riches of information to learn about is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
available through the internet,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the teachers are
also
having
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "broad knowledge".
a broad knowledge
to share and to guide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
the best in their level of academic.
As a result
, they will attain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of more evaluation of the teachers
instead
of study from the internet, which cannot
properly
render them in improving their learning.
Besides
, the machinery cannot be
fully
trusted and guaranteed to provide the best education and academic subjects. There are certain subjects included,
yet
it is not complete as what provided in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Hence
, the right information is not always being true for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
as well
as it will not
extremely
encourage their achievement.

By way of conclusion, although,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
individuals prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the internet for extent their insight,
yet
it cannot be
totally
trusted to depend on. As I would state that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
could guarantee the best result for the young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
by having studied face to face and open to open throughout the period.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay q1. What is the best class you have taken in school. Why was it the best in your opinion. Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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