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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? You should write at least 250 words. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.2

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 2
Globally, there are multiple variants and genres of music available. There's regional music that applies to a specific geographical location, as well as internationally acclaimed music that is known across the globe. In my opinion, enjoying and cherishing music should be identified as one of the key characteristics of humankind since it is one of the primary ways in which we differ from other living beings. The reason for the requirement of music can differ for a lot of people. Some people listen to music to gain happiness and joy, while some rely on it to bring them out of sadness and depression. For example, there are multitudes of rehabilitation centres that depend on musical sessions as a form of therapy for their occupants. Even asylums for the mentally challenged to understand the power of music as we have seen a lot of positive results through the usage of songs and pomp. Just by opening our minds, we can easily observe in awe, that music has the capacity to reach avenues of the mind that cannot be troubled elsehow. As with everything, music is also impacted by geographical regions but this time, the impact is on a positive note because we are now able to explore different kinds of music in different locations. Some instruments are specific to a piece of land like the bagpipes of Scotland and Nadaswarams of Tamil Nadu. These instruments are capable of producing music which can immediately transfer the listener to the respective landscapes. This is why I believe that traditional music carries more weight than international pieces-of-art. These kinds of music carry the intrinsic value of the area from where they originated from, which is not always present with international music. In conclusion, I would irrevocably accept that music is one of the primary requirements of mankind which I would want everyone to experience. A human gifted with sound ears should not be reluctant to music and every music listener should forever be open to all the available genres. Music is a compelling tool that has the capacity to change and heal the world, and such a tool must never be neglected.
Globally, there are multiple variants and genres of
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music
available. There's regional
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music
that
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applies to
a specific geographical location,
as well
as
internationally
acclaimed
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music
that
is known
across the globe. In my opinion, enjoying and cherishing
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music
should
be identified
as one of the key characteristics of humankind since it is one of the primary ways in which we differ from other living beings.

The reason for the requirement of
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music
can differ for
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a lot of
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people
.
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Some
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people
listen to
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music
to gain happiness and joy, while
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some
rely on it to bring them out of sadness and depression.
For example
, there are multitudes of rehabilitation
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centres
that depend on musical sessions as a form of therapy for their occupants. Even asylums for the mentally challenged to understand the power of
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music
as we have
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seen
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a lot of
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positive
results through the usage of songs and pomp.
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Just
by opening our minds, we can
easily
observe in awe, that
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music
has the capacity to reach avenues of the mind that cannot
be troubled
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elsehow
.

As with everything,
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music
is
also
impacted by geographical regions
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but
this time, the impact is on a
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positive
note
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because
we are
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now
able to explore
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different
kinds of
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music
in
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different
locations.
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Some
instruments are specific to a piece of land like the bagpipes of Scotland and
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Nadaswarams
of Tamil Nadu. These instruments are capable of producing
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music
which can immediately transfer the listener to the respective landscapes. This is why I believe that traditional
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music
carries more weight than international pieces-of-art. These kinds of
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music
carry the intrinsic value of the area from where they originated from, which is not always present with international music.

In conclusion
, I would
irrevocably
accept that
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music
is one of the primary requirements of mankind which I would want everyone to experience. A human gifted with sound ears should not be reluctant to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
and every
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music
listener should forever be open to all the available genres.
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Music
is a compelling tool that has the capacity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
and heal the world, and such a tool
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must
never
be neglected
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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