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When selecting a university, which factor among the following three do you consider the most important? Cost, size, or location. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

When selecting a university, which factor among the following three do you consider the most important? Cost, size, or location. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
We live in an age when many of us are using internet as a part of our family. It has changed the way of living in every country and also the financial system. What is more, it is going to make globe as a whole one village. Everyone in the future will follow the same path. This essay shows the merits and demerits of using internet. On the one hand, Internet is growing faster than ever before. The world is transforming into a global network, where every individual can access the information and communicate with whom they want. It has changed our life in such a manner we all accepted it as a family member. For example, some years back when there is no network communication, we use write letters, telegrams etc. , but when internet connection started in our lives, we are communicating by voice calls as well as video chat. Furthermore, it helps each and every single person in doing their work smoothly. On the other hand, in future it is going to rule the world, without which people won’t able to survive. For instance, nowadays public using internet access to google, at workplaces and also in their gadgets. This internet in ultimate is going to connect and change the lives of every individual on this earth. I agree that it transforms our daily life from the start of the internet and also helping us in developing our country. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that it is going to rule the forthcoming. The merits of using Network will outweigh the demerits. The earth is going to be a single piece of network.
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in an age when
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many
of us are using internet as a part of our family. It has
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changed
the way of living in every country and
also
the financial system.
What is more
, it is going to
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make
globe as a whole one village. Everyone in the future will follow the same path. This essay
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shows
the merits and demerits of using internet.

On the one hand, Internet is growing faster than ever
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before
. The world is transforming into a global
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network
, where every individual can access the information and communicate with whom they want. It has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
our life in such a manner we all
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accepted
it as a family member.
For example
,
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some
years back when there is no
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network
communication, we
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use
write letters, telegrams etc.
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,
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but
when internet connection
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started
in our
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lives
, we are communicating by voice calls
as well
as video chat.
Furthermore
, it
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helps
each and every single person in doing their work
smoothly
.

On the other hand
, in future it is going to
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rule
the world, without which
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people
won’t able to survive.
For instance
, nowadays public using internet access to google, at workplaces and
also
in their gadgets. This internet in ultimate is going to connect and
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change
the
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lives
of every individual on this earth. I
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agree
that it transforms our daily life from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of the internet and
also
helping us in developing our country.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that it is going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
the forthcoming. The merits of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Network
will outweigh the demerits. The earth is going to be a single piece of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
network
.
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IELTS essay When selecting a university, which factor among the following three do you consider the most important? Cost, size, or location. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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