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q2. Some people drive their own car to work or school. Others use public transportation. Which one is better and why? v.1

q2. Some people drive their own car to work or school. Others use public transportation. Which one is better and why? v. 1
Science is believed to be the least favourite subject in school, especially college, and sophomores tend to not choose science as their main subject. The causes of this phenomenon are still being argued, yet the effects are detrimental. I will critically discuss the causes and the effects towards this problem. To begin with, the causes of this ironic event are still vague, but it’s believed that youngsters don’t enjoy science, and they wanted to acknowledge the subject of their interests. Science is the most complex subject in the world, and the mysteries within it are yet to be unraveled, even by the world’s greatest physicists, Albert Einstein, and Stephen Hawking. The complexity of science will be denied by the adolescents, and then they started to venture themselves to find subjects that correlate with them. Moreover, the side effects are quite massive, there will be less numbers of scientists in the near future. This will surely affect our future in all aspects, since every part of our lives related to science. There is a plethora of mystifying secrets within science, even with a lot of the world’s greatest minds in the past those are yet to be revealed, and nowadays only the chosen ones will be able to participate in the project. The lack of numbers will prevent human being, able to discover new knowledge. In a nutshell, sophomores are lacking of interests to choose science as their main subject, and if this continues, it will affect our lifestyles in a very long term.
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Science
is believed
to be the least
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favourite
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subject
in school,
especially
college, and sophomores tend to not choose
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science
as their main
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subject
. The causes of this phenomenon are
still
being argued
,
yet
the effects are detrimental. I will
critically
discuss the causes and the effects towards this problem.

To
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begin
with, the causes of this ironic
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event
are
still
vague,
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but
it’s believed that youngsters don’t enjoy
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science
, and they wanted to acknowledge the
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subject
of their interests.
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Science
is the most complex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
in the world, and the mysteries within it are
yet
to
be unraveled
, even by the world’s greatest physicists, Albert Einstein, and Stephen Hawking. The complexity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
will
be denied
by the adolescents, and then they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to venture themselves to find
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subjects
that correlate with them.

Moreover
, the side effects are quite massive, there will be
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less
numbers of scientists in the near future. This will
surely
affect our future in all aspects, since every part of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
related to
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science
. There is a plethora of mystifying secrets within
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science
, even with
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a lot of
the world’s greatest minds in the past those are
yet
to
be revealed
, and nowadays
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the chosen ones will be able to participate in the project. The lack of numbers will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
human being, able to discover new knowledge.

In a nutshell, sophomores are lacking of interests to choose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
as their main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
, and if this continues, it will affect our lifestyles in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
long term.
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IELTS essay q2. Some people drive their own car to work or school. Others use public transportation. Which one is better and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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