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When choosing a place to live, what do you consider most important-location, size, style, number of rooms, types of rooms, or other features? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v.2

When choosing a place to live, what do you consider most important-location, size, style, number of rooms, types of rooms, or other features? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 2
Choosing a place to live is a very important decision, which so many factors could be considered in making a good decision. People consider many factors such as location, size, style, number of rooms or other features in making their decision. In my opinion, location is the most important factor because it automatically includes other factors such as price, environment and convenience. First, I prefer to live in a place where the atmosphere is very beautiful and convenient. A friendly neighborhood, where people are nice and easygoing, where neighbors care about each other, where I can rely on my neighbors in emergencies, is definitely important in selecting a place to live. When I feel tired or boring, I would like to walk to a nearby park, where I can relax myself, enjoy the beautiful scenes. A park near my house seems great. In addition, I would rather to live in a location near good schools, so my children could easily go to school. Therefore, location is very important. Second, I want to live in a place that is close to where I work. Getting up so early in the morning, while my wife and children are in bed, and I have no time to eat breakfast, and then driving hours to go to work, is unbearable for me. Moreover, access to transportation is another important factor I always consider. My children and wife could take a bus to school or to a shopping center rather than driving their own car. What’s more, low traffic is also important for me. Who do not enjoy living in a quiet place where there is low traffic? Third, price is also one of the most important factors in choosing a place to live. In some locations the prices for house is very high, a young man like me, just got married, at the start of my career, and with no support from family, cannot afford to buy. Therefore, I would rather living in a place where the houses are not so expensive. To recapitulate briefly, location is the most important factor for me in choosing a place to live because it includes so many important facets, as I clearly illustrate in the body paragraphs. Who reject to live in a place that is cheap, beautiful, quite and near work? Is not the location the most important factor in making a decision?
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, size, style, number of rooms or other features in making their
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. In my opinion,
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is the most
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factor
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it
automatically
includes other
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factors
such as price, environment and convenience.

First
, I prefer to
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in a
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where the atmosphere is
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beautiful
and convenient. A friendly neighborhood, where
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are nice and easygoing, where neighbors care about each other, where I can rely on my neighbors in emergencies, is definitely
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important
in selecting a
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place
to
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live
. When I feel tired or boring, I would like to walk to a nearby park, where I can relax myself, enjoy the
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beautiful
scenes. A park near my
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house
seems great.
In addition
, I would
rather
to
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live
in a
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location
near
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good
schools,
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so
my children could
easily
go to school.
Therefore
,
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location
is
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.

Second, I want to
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in a
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place
that is
close to where I work. Getting up
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early in the morning, while my wife and children are in bed, and I have no time to eat breakfast, and then driving hours to go to work, is unbearable for me.
Moreover
, access to transportation is another
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important
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factor
I always consider. My children and wife could take a bus to school or to a shopping center
rather
than driving their
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own
car. What’s more, low traffic is
also
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important
for me. Who do not enjoy living in a quiet
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place
where there is low traffic?

Third, price is
also
one of the most
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important
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factors
in choosing a
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to
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. In
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locations
the prices for
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is
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high, a young
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man
like me,
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got
married, at the
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of my career, and with no support from family, cannot afford to
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buy
.
Therefore
, I would
rather
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living
in a
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place
where the
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houses
are not
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so
expensive.

To recapitulate
briefly
,
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location
is the most
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important
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factor
for me in choosing a
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to
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it includes
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facets, as I
clearly
illustrate in the body paragraphs. Who
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reject
to
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live
in a
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place
that is
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cheap
,
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beautiful
, quite and near work? Is not the
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the most
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15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay When choosing a place to live, what do you consider most important-location, size, style, number of rooms, types of rooms, or other features? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
397 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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