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When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. v. 7
It is sometimes argued that the key factor leads to the success is working hard and there is no presence of luck. While I completely agree with this statement, I do not believe that the success of people is only because of diligence. First of all, conscientiousness is primary step to achieve dream. When working hard, people will gain experience and even at risk, they will mature. For example, Harland Sanders – the founder of KFC, before his success when he was sixty-years old, he always tried his best despite of many times of unsuccess. Therefore, to reach the success, people will hitch their wagon to a star and never give up. The next reason is no one becomes prosperous without having enough knowledge and indolent will be eliminated since there are many graduated people around; it’s hard to be capture attention. So individuals must advance their education and improve themselves. If someone has a good position in a large company despite of lacking of well-educated, he will be asked to resign soon. However, it can be seen from the opposite angle. In some case, when people work hard at a job where the boss doesn' t value their efforts, all their hard work gets them is taken for granted. As a result, just working hard by itself will exhaust them and shorten their lifespan without any benefits to them. At school, for example, students sometimes get good marks by luck if their teachers mark the students wrong. In conclusion, I believe that without working hard and having luck, people can not make their ambition come true.
It is
sometimes
argued that the key factor leads to the
success
is
working
hard
and there is no presence of luck. While I completely
agree
with this statement, I do not believe that the
success
of
people
is
only
because
of diligence.

First of all
, conscientiousness is primary step to achieve dream. When
working
hard
,
people
will gain experience and even at
risk
, they will mature.
For example
,
Harland
Sanders
the founder of KFC,
before
his
success
when he was sixty-years
old
, he always tried his best
despite of
many
times of
unsuccess
.
Therefore
, to reach the
success
,
people
will hitch their wagon to a star and never give up. The
next
reason is no one becomes prosperous without having
enough
knowledge and indolent will
be eliminated
since there are
many
graduated
people
around; it’s
hard
to be capture attention.
So
individuals
must
advance their education and
improve
themselves. If someone has a
good
position in a large
company
despite of
lacking of well-educated, he will
be asked
to resign
soon
.

However
, it can be
seen
from the opposite angle. In
some
case, when
people
work
hard
at a job where the boss
doesn&
#039; t value their efforts, all their
hard
work
gets
them
is taken
for granted.
As a result
,
just
working
hard
by itself will exhaust them and shorten their lifespan without any benefits to them. At school,
for example
, students
sometimes
get
good
marks by luck if their teachers mark the students
wrong
.

In conclusion
, I believe that without
working
hard
and having luck,
people
can not
make
their ambition
come
true.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
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